Clayton Miller:

Body poses and acting is great! The lip sync distracted me a lot though.

Yeray Díaz Díaz:

Good job. The change on camera might be a little to drastic, but great acting.

Ryan Hagen:

Lipsync is off, but other than that I thought this was a great peice. Good job.

Deanna Bishop:

I love it!

Ryan Hobbiebrunken:

ooh. Great camera shot at the end. The lipsync is off some. Just needs some more polish! Great job!

Shahbaaz Shah:

Fun acting and staging! Something I was harped on back when I did a female clip before was to watch for "chewy" mouth movement. Keep the mouth shapes small. But looks great!

Brad Bradbury:

This is a personal thing but I think the hangman composition is a little overt.
you've got some pops in the lipsync. check first 'living' and 'ave no'.

Eric Luhta:

Looking pretty good overall. The two main crits I have are the lip sync and the framing of the last shot. I see what you're getting at, but the straight center framing lining up the noose, head, and window isn't very strong in my opinion. It makes a single vertical line down the very center which isn't very interesting. Good job overall though.

Michael Slater:

I like the noose. Nice touch. Cool head movements and i like the eyes.

Isaac Hingley:

I like this shot. I think that the mouth shapes for the lipsync could be toned down a bit. They work, but I think they are a bit too large for this dialog. Also I think you should reconsider the staging for the last shot. I especially do not like where the window is positioned. I see what you are going with here having her look through the rope. But, it would be nice to see a bit more depth in the staging.

Dwarakanath Jnaneswar Ekkirala:

dude.. you could have a couple of little accents with hands in the beginning especially since you are showing the full body.. and some more movement of upperbody verses head as if he is "spewing" out words is a bit necessary.. And head tilts could be a slight bit more deliberate than subtle, IMO. Good idea by the way.. And coming to the camera angle, the second shot seems "smack in the middle of the frame".. may be a bit looking to screen left? The idea of thirds? Other than that.. looking good man! Keep rocking!

Frank Collazo:

very goo

Florent Perrin:

Nice! End is funny, well done!

Ryan King:

I can't say much negatively for the animation. Just two things confuse me though. She seems more angry and even befuddled in your animation then distrought. That is an acting choice though because you animated what you had well. The other thing i'm wondering about is composition. Both shots have a very central composition. Again this isn't really animation but i was just curious on the reasoning.

Aaron Clement:

Nice. Well timed... imaginitive. I like it!

Traci Plagmann:

Great staging and acting. The lipsync is a little off in places.

Gregory Marlow:

Ive been watching this one on the forum a bit. I think it is pretty good conceptually but I think the cut to the noose limits your chances to show good character animation.

ArunVijayan:

concentrate in body mech:

Alonso Soriano:

BAM strong staging. Nice contact on the fingers. I'd say cheat her face more towards camera as she turns around, you can get away with it and Bishop has such a shallow face, especially since she will be turning into darkness. Left arm needs a little more settle after the turn. Final pose of the hands feels akward, I suspect because we are looking slightly down at her (though that's not entirely clear) maybe a different pose would be better, just not quite clear what she's doing with them. Really nicely done.

-Alonso

Christian Leon Christensen:

creepy!

Christiaan Moleman:

Really like the business with the window, but not sure about the expression in the 2nd shot. Too much anger and too little desperation.

Lip-sync seems a bit off here and there tho.

Nicolás Cantarelli:

good acting!

Derek Mabson:

The acting choices are good. The lip sync seems to lag a frame. Animation is good. The staging is nice.

John T. Coomey:

nice little twist in the end. good job

Virgil Mihailescu:

nice staging and framing, the body animation is cool, although I wish she was closer to that window, to lean more on it... interact with it in some other way. but that's subjective stuff. I think the lipsync is off for the most part, even though the movement is nice and round. the face expressions are great!

Taber Dunipace:

Interesting staging and concept. Acting is specific and pleasing. Animation is a bit rough in places but mostly well done.

Robert Tighe:

nice cut. pretty good mechanics. depressing though!

Mike Courtney:

I would have liked to see the poses a bit stronger, but nice job overall.

Dan Segarra:

Hey! How's it going? :)

About your animation choices, I wouldn't have had her literally speaking of actually killing herself. The intonation in her voice doesn't feel that depressed to me. It sounds like she's just realized that she's not living how she wants... not that she wants to die. When people say things, a lot of times they don't mean what they say. It's subtext. If you start thinking about what people are really meaning opposed to what they are literally saying, I think your animation choices will definitely improve.

The movement looks nice, although the lip sync doesn't feel like it matches in a few areas.

Hope that helps. Good luck this and next month!

Ryan Malm:

I love the noose at the end. The lip sync seems way off until you switch camera angles, then it all looks great! performance was really good overall except for the sync that I mentioned

Kyle Mohr:

Good job, I like the addition of the noose, it adds a lot of seriousness to her story. The lip sync could use another pass though, especially at the beginning. I also think the mouth shapes could stay a little smaller, since she's talking kinda quietly.

Good job though, keep up the hard work!

Eric Stirpe:

Creepy. Very creepy. Your lipsyncing in the beginning is off by a bit, however.
Oh, very nice on that 180 turn though, great sense of weight. I wish you had applied some of that same "weighting" to the beginning pose however, as (s)he looks out the window; that one's a bit floaty.

luis veiga pumar:

the lipsync at the end ' life i have no wish to live' is almost there need some fixing, shapes are there but timing is of by a couple of frames i think. the rest of thelipsync needs more work.

body freezes just before the camera cut.

Aziz Kocanaogullari:

great choice of camera angles. animation is very smooth and natural.

Dylan Maxwell:

cool ideas, I like it in general but it's a bit "on the nose". I like the hand animation especially.

Jett Atwood:

Nice! The acting feels honest and I like the little surprise with the camera cut at the end.

Jason Campbell:

Really just need to polish the lip sync, love the cut and frming in telling the story.