Conway Dobbs:

clear story but the mouth moment does not go with the words very well. Also too slow at the start what is he looking at make that clear. A character should never stop moving. Yes this effect some times works in 2D but not 3D. Even in those moments you should have some movement, it helps a lot. Character who is not holding the jewel, mouth is too far forward. The grab is too fast. What scares him?