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Leaving for War
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Nice on the faces, but it would have been more powerful if you'd moved the bodies a little.
I tried to show the relation between both of them but I feel that I should have held the frame longer at the start to allow the acknowledgment of the two characters in the same room.
I think my animation is too "robotic" for the guy in the doorway, one example is the scene where the soldier says "I'm not afraid" I should have added some more movement to the body and a better facial expression to blend into the pose of straighting up.
Also when the second character brought the pipe to his mouth was probably a bit too fast.
I like how the room is dark and the characters are facing each other like they are best friends and the other is trying to warn him. Nice work
William Barry Eggington:
bit stiff. I think your framing is good though. Well composed.
Animator: Bradley Adams
Description: A young warrior is about to leave for war and before stepping out onto the long road ahead He has a few words before it all begins.
Experience: 1 Year
Time taken: 1 Week (Started very late)