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by Nick Kondo
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Body mechanics are almost there. Keep working at it.
This could be the winner! I think it fits pretty well with the sound, the emotions and characters. Great job!
Decently staged piece, although it seems to assume we know what the story is, and there isn't a suggestion of one here - except for the fact that the antagonist is gazing into the universe knowingly?? Even so, animation needs further honing to refine it. But it looks nice enough.
Good timing and facial expressions. nice I like it :)
I love it, this is great. I like the way you overlapped the zipper and the hair. I think the action between fr68 and fr90 (when he walks half step) is unnecessary and because he keeps walking a longer distance later it doesn't look good, maybe you could have done something with him in the same "hard pose" after looking at his fist, relaxed his hand, or anything to enhance that introspective moment, and then jump to the amazing reaction you did from fr101.
By the way, is that a commercial rig? Looks super fun to animate!
Nice work! The one thing that caught my eye was the staging of the two characters...by the end of the shot, the Jedi Master is all the way to screen left...I felt like I wanted to see more screen space in front of his face...it would make it more like their eyes are connecting...just a thought. Nice work though!
Acting and animation really great! Idea is a little obvious but camera angles told it perfectly.
- Feeling a bit of an awkward head vibration on head at around frame 245
- There could be some subtle iris dilation to push the expression
- The final expression at around 375 is completely static and needs some subtle movements to allow the face to relax back to its neutral state.
Otherwise this is looking pretty fantastic :)!
William Barry Eggington:
could use more body mechanics polish on the guy's turn at frame 247
Decent animation. very nice characters..
Animator: Nick Kondo
Description: A young apprentice tries to convince his master that he is ready.
Programs used: Maya, After Effects
Experience: 14 years.
Time taken: 3 weeks.