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Defeated Solider Consoling

by Awan Ali Astori

Final Rating: 4.61. Finished 65 out of 223 entries.

466 views including the voting period.


Animator: Awan Ali Astori

Description: This is my first entry i hope you all will appreciate and also Critiques me...

Experience: 6 Months

Time taken: 2 weeks(after work)


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Richard Chhoa:

Nice work.
The boys range of motion could be bigger. His hand at frame 20 when he's gesturing could be emphasised. The cut to the king wasn't working for me. It stayed on him for a short while then quickly cut back to the boy.

I like how you got the king to leave his chair. The drawing of the sword didn't really nail it for me. I think it might be because he draws his sword out too early and quick.

I imagine he walks up to the boy slowly drawing out his sword and points at him with it while the 2nd "you will be" part plays.

محمد فاروق:

Good Job nice settled acting... keep it up

Sajid Ali Mansoori:

good work. but need more elements..


Good Job

William Barry Eggington:

Not bad. The king's motion in particular is pretty good. Not a whole lot going on so no huge score but what is there is quite good.

Lady Musician:

Ending mouth animation was off! Not bad. The scene feels too dark (as if shading wasn't properly applied).

Yousuf Abbas:

Good.. Keep it up :)

David Barrow:

The voice of the king sounds more ominous and your character was more excited.

Omer Waseem:

Nice one... Keep the moral high