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Personal Essay


Final Rating: 3.92. Finished 80 out of 201 entries.

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Description: A rebellious student doesn't like the grade she received for her essay and is therefore angry and frustrated. Her teacher feels the content of the student's essay is quite intriguing despite the fact that she didn't do what the assignment asked....

Experience: few years as hobbyist

Time taken: 2-3 weeks


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Richard Adams:

Hard to rate. Parts of the movement is terrific, especially the face on the woman with the skirt. Other movements are pretty bad. Odd leaning with mohawk hair woman--what's keeping her from falling over?

Kyra Simone:

I LOVE the reactions of both of these characters, and how they play off of each other. What would make this even better would be more 'bounce', or settle frames. Notice how in the first shot, you end it on her head still moving. The 'thank you very MUCH' would have that much more punch if you gave her neck time to recoil, even just a frame or two. Sharper words call for sharper animation. Now, the second character's movement is much more suited for this kind of animation... soothing, smooth and silky. Instead of recoiling, this character should ease in and out of actions as she does mostly. Good work!

Adam O:

I think this is really good for 2D animation and having the key poses and expressions! If this were in 3D I would just have some motion to the static poses to give it more life, but that's maybe a realistic limitation of doing 2D frame by frame. Nice work!