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I'll just take a water

by Paul Boogaards

Final Rating: 3.28. Finished 62 out of 85 entries.

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Animator: Paul Boogaards

Description: A waitress tries to take an order.

Experience: 5 years of school acting classes

Time taken: a little bit every day


(Commenting only available during the rating period)

Ben Zingo:

brightening up the scene with more lighting would help, as well as focusing on hitting key poses. Blocking out the movement to land on specific moments/actions will help your characters feel more decisive and a little less "floaty"

Byron Pockrandt:

Would like to see more emotion in the characters and more eye contact between them. They look as if they're spacing out.

ro crown:

Way too robotic of mood and movements...but if you did this in 2d drawn animation...do me, you would get a bigger and better score overall...just sayin' ..explore your options of animation story telling is all some of us suggest.

So only 5 stars from me.