by Myfanwy King
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uhmmm... cool, I guess. weird lipsync though
this is good! you made some great choices with her sarcasm and the turn on the "please!" bit. you're nailing the idea of the scene. the stiffness maybe kind of works in an old-school or "Hotel Transylvania" way, but I'd love to see you get loose and work from the spine/hips/shoulders. a bit too many poses on her first line. make sure you're acting it out and recording yourself
I like the sobbing from the right-hand character in the beginning, but the hands felt too jumpy to me. It could help to slow in/slow out of your poses, and use the whole body of the right-hand character to give a feeling of weight. The staging is clear and the acting is pretty well paced overall, and I think it would look quite good if it were brought to a more polished level.
Animator: Myfanwy King
Description: Poor fester all he wanted to do was dance, but mother had other ideas.
Experience: Hold a degree but still learning
Time taken: 72hours