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this shows your potential but the hand motions are a bit repetitive and stiff. are you acting it out and recording yourself? don't move the camera. focus on making one or two well composed shots and only drift the camera if absolutely necessary for the intention of the shot.
This is fundamentally pretty good, but there's a disconnect between the acting and the dialog I can't quite put my finger on.
Description: Mom doesn't know what to do with his weird son!
Experience: 4 months
Time taken: 18 hours