Ben Zingo:

the characters seem a bit small compared to the proportions of the car (in particular, that steering wheel looks huge).
Also a bit odd that they're just talking back and forth in the car, and there is no photo for context.
some of the actions also feel fast/kinda jerky. Make sure you add a little anticipation, overshoot, etc!

Leonardo Rivera:

Story doesn't make sense. Where's the photo? It should be clear from the staging and the characters actions what's going on in the scene even without the audio and I think that's what's lacking in this shot.