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Settle Down (smoking)
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David Hendrix Shovlin:
Real solid. Hadn't even thought about a cigar.
Too much cigar.
There's not that much happening as far as the phrasing of the shot is concerned. You should apply more than the cigarette actions to this piece.
I love that you're working with the sound file with the drags on the cigarette, but maybe cut out a few of them? Right now, that's a *lot* of cigarette smoke inhalation in a short amount of time. :)
Really good - the timing of the lip sync at the start of "Saul, tell him" is a bit off though - like the S sound starts while the cigarette is still in the character's mouth.
The cigar works really nicely with the heavy breathing, good concept there! It would be nice if you had added a few feminine touches to the model, even if it was just pink eyebrows or something to say a bit more "female." Keep at it, and good luck with future entries!
Animator: Adam Sirrelle
Description: Nervous smoking and concern.
Experience: >4 years
Time taken: 2 weeks