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I think you're loosing a bit the viewer with so many cuts not justified by the story. In a movie, every shot has its own meaning, and something happening in the frame triggers each cut.
The poses were very expressive and the tempo was varied nicely, but the transitions seem a bit poppy and the mouth doesn't match up to the dialog very well. Having some more extreme mouth poses and synchronizing it to the dialog a bit more carefully would help immensely.
This is jerky, the poses make no sense, and the camera angles are confusing
Matthew W. Nuttall:
To much random movement that does not fit in with the dialog.
imran younas butt:
need work on facial expression
need also poses
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