#1 09-17-2017 10:28 pm

meliascg
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September entry

So... lets I'm trying finish one more time haha.
This is my first block, I'v decided to make a simple acting to can explore more expression and the diologe.
CC are welcome

               

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#2 09-18-2017 3:03 pm

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Re: September entry

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#3 09-19-2017 4:09 am

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Re: September entry

One more UP

               

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#4 09-21-2017 4:38 am

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Re: September entry

Improving the acting... A lot things to do... but keeping here wink

               

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#5 09-21-2017 8:36 pm

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Re: September entry

not bad... good acting.

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#6 09-22-2017 7:14 am

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Re: September entry

Thanks bro.

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#7 09-22-2017 3:53 pm

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Re: September entry

I was trying make a better cam to my scene, and I used this this plane to find the points of interest. And I changed the focal length parameters to get a little bit less distortion on characters.
So... I think it works. Right?

               

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#8 09-22-2017 6:23 pm

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Re: September entry

much better

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#9 09-25-2017 9:24 am

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Re: September entry

this is looking great. i think he turns towards her a little bit too soon. great stuff !

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#10 09-27-2017 2:15 am

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Re: September entry

The pace is feeling nice on the walking.   I agree with northybaby. It would read better if he was still looking around when she was saying the line, then turn and say his line with of an "of course!" expression.  I also think there could be a bigger change in his expression from the line "no one even asked me if I took the milk money..."  change from a more frustrated/disappointed expression to a more hopeless expression when he says, "I just got a 3 day vacation".  I also see what you're going for with him raising 3 fingers on the line "3 day vacation." but I feel like it comes off a little trite.  I think maybe just a quick general hand gesture would be enough to emphasis the point.  The audience will be looking at his face more than his hands anyway.  When the girl says, "did you take it"  maybe have her stand up and lean in towards the boy as if she's really concerned.  The change in posture and stance will help her feel more engaged too.  One thing to keep in mind too is where are your characters coming from and where are they going?  That will help with development. Overall, it's coming along!  I'm excited to see this when it's done.  Keep it up!

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#11 09-27-2017 5:27 pm

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Re: September entry

Thanks all for the tips and good words, for now I'm polish and finish my shot to send it in time.

thank you guys one more time. winkwinkwinkwink

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