#1 06-25-2017 3:14 am

Bruno Fabian
Registered: 05-02-2016
Posts: 2

Wip 11secs June

Hello everyone.
Its my first real participation on 11 secs with a 3D animation.
Every comment will be so much helpfull.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2EYl2VRSQHw

Last edited by Bruno Fabian (06-25-2017 3:20 am)

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#2 06-26-2017 10:34 am

snuffymcsnuff
Registered: 02-04-2013
Posts: 93

Re: Wip 11secs June

Looks like you've skipped some of the bigger body movements in order to add some early flavor (the finger movements for example) and I'd suggest taking a step back at this point. The guy in the back is rather distracting in the beginning - his movements are hard to interpret at this stage and they take attention away from the guy in front. You might also wanna hold your poses on the guy in front a little longer or skip one of the hand gestures, that whole section seems a little busy overall.
The ending isn't bad, but the whole last hand gesture (combined with the finger movements) doesn't really work for me - it doesn't feel like a very natural movement to go with the dialogue. Was it something you acted out?

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#3 06-26-2017 5:46 pm

Bruno Fabian
Registered: 05-02-2016
Posts: 2

Re: Wip 11secs June

Thanks for your comment. No, it is not smt that I acted out.
I just did that poses and worked on the curves.

I will try to review it in a good time to send it in the deadline.

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