#1 06-13-2017 8:23 am

IvanMendozaMedina
From: Mexico
Registered: 10-14-2015
Posts: 53

June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

Hi all,
Here's my WIP so far.

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Your feedback is very welcome and much appreciated.

Thanks.

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#2 06-13-2017 12:03 pm

Boumboum34
Registered: 04-01-2010
Posts: 48

Re: June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

Really neat concept! Never thought of using a superhero, even though the audio is from a superhero movie. lol.

The one thing that bothers me most, the last two seconds, the superhero lets go of the crook and walks towards the camera,  his back to the crook--and the crook, instead of taking that wide open opportunity to flee like lightning, just stands there. I'd say either have the crook try to flee a 2nd time, or have the hero make sure to not let go and not let the crook out of his sight.

Really looking forward to seeing where you go with this!

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#3 06-14-2017 2:31 am

IvanMendozaMedina
From: Mexico
Registered: 10-14-2015
Posts: 53

Re: June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

Thanks Boumboum. That's a good point. And thanks as well for replying to my other post.

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#4 06-16-2017 3:00 am

Masstertron
Registered: 11-26-2015
Posts: 6

Re: June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

I like the concept!

The crim's poses are nice and tell his story well, and I think on "it's an outlaw name" you could push the crim's posing further. Have him even more ashamed, hunched. At the moment he is actually taller than the hero in-frame, and they kind of have the same status. Same thing right at the end, I think the camera could be lower, and looking up more, so the hero will take up more of the frame, and the crim is kind of in the background at that time, maybe looking around to escape a second time.

Great work, keep it up! smile

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#5 06-16-2017 6:05 am

IvanMendozaMedina
From: Mexico
Registered: 10-14-2015
Posts: 53

Re: June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

Thanks mate. I think your entry is awesome! Top 3 for sure if not the winner. I will take your advise. Cheers.

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#6 06-17-2017 10:47 am

IvanMendozaMedina
From: Mexico
Registered: 10-14-2015
Posts: 53

Re: June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

Hi all,

Here's an update.

https://youtu.be/VKoTM_KXVZI

Thank you.

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#7 06-23-2017 1:01 am

IvanMendozaMedina
From: Mexico
Registered: 10-14-2015
Posts: 53

Re: June 2017 WIP. Feedback welcome.

Hi all,

Another update.

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