#1 03-05-2017 3:23 pm

Pandastyczny
From: Poland
Registered: 11-24-2015
Posts: 11

March WIP

Hi,

It's my "work in progress" for march competition. A basic dialogue between two characters. Would love to hear some feedback about posing and keys. I'm not sure about both : ). I really like the last pose of the bear character but don't sure if it's readable. And not sure about arms starting frame 46. Don't know if it's necessary.
Any feedback much appreciated, thanks!

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#2 03-06-2017 3:07 pm

Pandastyczny
From: Poland
Registered: 11-24-2015
Posts: 11

Re: March WIP

Hi!

I added some frames to the front character and redraw this arms in bear character which i wasn't so sure about.

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#3 03-09-2017 9:14 am

acolors
Registered: 07-01-2014
Posts: 286
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Re: March WIP

Hello,
Since nobody has left any comments on your wip I shall share my opinion.
I would solve the problem with the human arm by moving the arm to the
right (his right as well the camera right) That is all right when his arm end up
in front of a bear.
That gives a viewer some feeling of the space between 2 characters.
Now,
a man's arm moving up, looks to me like the Nazi/Hitler salute.
Also I think it is easier for you to draw waving the right hand/arm
to his right.  As you are drawing right now you have to
rely on perspective shortening. As I suggest the perspective is the
factor as well but not so much.
I like
very much your idea of the bear barging in to the hunter's cabin in the woods
after not seeing each other for a while. I assume that is the case here.
(perhaps it is a house in the city.....that could be funny ....bear in the city
well not really not where I come from).
To
stress the bear barging in... I would have the door wide open behind the
bear in the background. The door can even jump out of hinges as it was
moved forcefully by the bear......lol (that is the last stage of your wip drawing b/g).
The bear poses are good except when bear says "what" I would
hold its arms apart for a second longer & not rise its left forearm up (NO)
The human
turn around to camera is also a brilliant move sitting behind kind of a bar top.
One
more thing, when the man is back to camera I think his left shoulder
should be a bit up to show he bears/supports all his body weight on left arm on a bar top
when he makes that right hand gesture.saying: "Voice 2: You. Barging in here,"
(You observed well man's tilting to the left his head & torso at this precise moment).
Powodzenia. Good luck
Again love your idea for this audio.....well done.
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#4 03-18-2017 12:25 pm

Pandastyczny
From: Poland
Registered: 11-24-2015
Posts: 11

Re: March WIP

Hi!
Thank you very much for your comments and suggestions! I changed the hand movement and it works much better. I hope i'll be able to finish this on time and i'll leave background for "if i'll have time".
I'm posting another WIP, i see that i have to do much better job between frames 80 and 120. Would love to hear some more feedback from you.

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#5 03-19-2017 2:33 am

nithu3d
Registered: 09-07-2014
Posts: 10

Re: March WIP

hi !
The hand , when he says "YOU!" seems out of proportion. The length of the hand seems short. Maybe you shortened it so as to avoid it obstructing the bears face ..?

2.When the bear says "ARE YOU....."
    Add a noticeable long enough anticipation before he goes on to deliver his piece.


goodluck!

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