#1 02-18-2017 8:04 pm

makistony
Registered: 09-13-2016
Posts: 3

Febuary competition_2017 WIP

Hi, It's the first time I get on competition. I'm trying do tradicional animation. It's will be great if you could make some critiques.
Thanks,

https://youtu.be/6NcajhVBbEo

Last edited by makistony (02-18-2017 8:16 pm)

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#2 02-19-2017 1:58 am

woodlandmermaid
Registered: 01-25-2017
Posts: 8

Re: Febuary competition_2017 WIP

I like where this is going! So, when the guy is twirling the glasses around, I thought they had flung off his finger (thus confusing me when I saw them back on his face at the end). I think this is just due to there positioning. Right now, they lay rather flat on his hand. While spinning, if you position them to be a little higher up and sticking out of the hand silhouette, I think it will read a lot better. Also, a small note, her glasses disappear when she is shocked. This could totally be because you didn't draw them in yet, but if not, I'm not sure why her glasses would have gone away.

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#3 02-19-2017 5:07 am

That Guy
Registered: 11-15-2016
Posts: 7

Re: Febuary competition_2017 WIP

I really enjoy the drawings.

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#4 02-19-2017 11:56 am

BMitch
From: Viborg, Denmark
Registered: 09-04-2014
Posts: 11

Re: Febuary competition_2017 WIP

Hi there! I enjoy the decisions of your acting, especially when the guy is interacting with his glasses smile
You might need to have a look at this video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y4wX_dmh8_g , since I think your camera placement makes the reading of your characters a little bit weird, it feels like they don't face each other when they talk, because their body are oriented towards the right corner when you have the closeup. Draw a room plan, your characters at the table and the camera (2 of them) use that as a guide to know where the characters are standing and keep their places, don't switch them, since is such a short time we see them.
If you're confused I can explain a little more smile

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#5 02-19-2017 3:50 pm

makistony
Registered: 09-13-2016
Posts: 3

Re: Febuary competition_2017 WIP

Thanks for the feedback, I enjoyed it very much. I just uploaded one new changed version.

https://youtu.be/RLTqNOd2GhA

Thanks,
Max

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#6 02-19-2017 5:23 pm

navaneeth3d
From: India
Registered: 01-21-2015
Posts: 22

Re: Febuary competition_2017 WIP

The cameras look much better now !

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