#1 06-06-2014 6:11 am

sthorpe777
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Help me turn #34 into #1 next competition. Tear this up please!

http://www.11secondclub.com/competition … try/NwHmTH



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#2 06-06-2014 2:06 pm

KyleG
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Re: Help me turn #34 into #1 next competition. Tear this up please!

I think you have a bit too much going on, in terms of the devil character moving & all the color changes, it ends up really distracting the viewer
In terms of the story I didn't really understand what was going on/why all the color changes were happening
In terms of animation - you need some more moving holds - the female character hits a lot of dead spots, where she isn't moving at all - with all the movement, I'm not sure where I"m suppose to be looking & causes a bit of eye strain


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#3 06-06-2014 4:58 pm

sthorpe777
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Re: Help me turn #34 into #1 next competition. Tear this up please!

thanks KyleG!!!!!!

these are super valuable observations big_smile
I will go simpler next submission most Def!


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