#1 09-02-2013 3:22 am

Kai
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August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

Hey guys!

I missed the submission!! yikes Anyway, I need more eyes on it. Please let me know what you think about it.

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Kai

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#2 09-02-2013 8:43 am

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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

Excellent!

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#3 09-02-2013 2:09 pm

hache
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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

Why I didn't see this on the voting? yikes
Great job!

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#4 09-02-2013 2:44 pm

Kai
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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

hey! Thanks Hache and TaiBo!! smile

@Hache , well after 24 hours Animation marathon to complete this piece.. My mind sort of went KABOOM!! I thought I submitted it.. But I think I didnt?? or It did not go through.. hehe.. Anyway.. I'm still working on polishing this.. smile Please fire feedbacks! smile 

Thanks for taking your time looking through smile
Kai

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#5 09-04-2013 1:19 am

Kai
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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

some notes for myself,

1.end camera pan earlier.
2. check sky hand spacing frame 24-28
3.Off set sky head and chest rotation frame 8-10 so that it don't move together
4. lower sky right hand first pose. Delay the hand. hand action should lead frame 1-4
5. raise sky left hand first frame.. offset the hand pose so that they are not mirrored
6. Refine sky left hand jerks at frame 32 - 38
7. Refine sky right hand when its dangling.
8. Delay sky hands action at frame 38-52.. Take note of jerk space.
9. Define the hand/arms pose even when its not on screen.. frame 96 - 100
10. refine the breathing so that he looks heavy hearted as he breathe.
11. Add head nuances
12. Add hands nuances even when off screen
13. Refine idling acting.
14. Refine lipsync especially towards the end.
15. Enhance face emotion. Especially idling.
16. Add head nuances for  girl. some jerk as she bite lips.. or controlling her emotions.
17. Add breathing so that she looks heavy hearted.
18. Look for hair and tongue ctr.
19.Floating lips at frame 253
20/ offset and refine hand action when she raise the book up.
21. When she sigh.. let her sway alittle. dizziness
22. Let her flutter more.. and shakes.
23. Refine lipsync  especially the end.
24.  Add nuances to head actions when she say.. and you donno what..
25. During the parting.. Change her pose to more tense as she said wanting.. Can try hold the book tighter and squeeze herself alittle ounce of energy more. ..relax only when she turn and walk away.
26. Change sky acting as he reacting to what she says..Let him sway alittle right after he finish speaking.. .. when She end her first sentence, Let sky breath to attention..  Add a slight tip reaction when she walk away..

let me know if theres something new from the list smile.
once again, thanks for taking your time!

cheerios!
kai

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#6 09-07-2013 8:58 am

Kai
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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

Hey Guys!~

Another refinement pass. Let me know what do you think wink

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Cheers! Moving on to Sept Competition! big_smile

Kai

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#7 09-07-2013 3:35 pm

hache
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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

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#8 09-07-2013 6:06 pm

Kai
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Re: August Animation :) Please let me know what do you think..

Haha! Nice one Hache~ Thanks for the applause! Cheers!!

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