#1 09-11-2012 4:43 pm

Weiswayne
From: Malaysia
Registered: 08-28-2012
Posts: 18

Intimate Bench scene

Hey guys,this is my first time joining the competition. looking forward to compete with you guys big_smile

anyway, here's what i have so far.

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Last edited by Weiswayne (09-11-2012 4:46 pm)

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#2 09-12-2012 2:23 pm

Weiswayne
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Registered: 08-28-2012
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Re: Intimate Bench scene

some updates.

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#3 09-12-2012 2:34 pm

J.K. Riki
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Re: Intimate Bench scene

So far so good! Here's a thought. Push the pose between "a little before I die" and "haven't I?" It will make both poses around it much stronger.


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#4 09-12-2012 5:49 pm

Weiswayne
From: Malaysia
Registered: 08-28-2012
Posts: 18

Re: Intimate Bench scene

@JKR:alright, i'll try to work it out. thanks

can't sleep, so i did some updates.

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#5 09-12-2012 8:19 pm

Polish63
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Re: Intimate Bench scene

Her hand that comes up should be a little lower maybe along the jawline. Its too distracting. Also I would work a little with the camera towards the end. Notice that both characters are on the one half of the screen while the other is completely empty.


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#6 09-19-2012 4:37 pm

Weiswayne
From: Malaysia
Registered: 08-28-2012
Posts: 18

Re: Intimate Bench scene

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@Polish63 : is it better now?

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#7 09-20-2012 10:14 pm

Nicol3
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Re: Intimate Bench scene

OOOOHHHHH SNAAAPPPPPLLEEE This is looking great.  Super excited to see the final piece!

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#8 09-27-2012 3:38 am

Weiswayne
From: Malaysia
Registered: 08-28-2012
Posts: 18

Re: Intimate Bench scene

Thanks Nicol3!
i hope i can make it in time, have been seriously slacking off recently tongue

heres an update:
trying to get the boy done, and get finishing touches before submitting.

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#9 09-27-2012 5:42 pm

auriarvin
From: Los Angeles
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Re: Intimate Bench scene

Love the emotion you are able to portray, good job! Careful with the lips, at the moment they seem too fast. I also agree with JKR, I think you could push the last poses a little more. Excited to see the final piece smile


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#10 09-27-2012 6:08 pm

kpatel
From: India
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Re: Intimate Bench scene

like the emotions you got in it, over all needs finish touch and  i think you have to take care of  the movements  for the boy also without distracting the animation of girl.  Nice work. smile and smile


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#11 09-28-2012 3:57 am

Weiswayne
From: Malaysia
Registered: 08-28-2012
Posts: 18

Re: Intimate Bench scene

Thanks guys,final should be coming up later today!

@auriarvin: man,your reel rocks!

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#12 09-28-2012 5:18 pm

Weiswayne
From: Malaysia
Registered: 08-28-2012
Posts: 18

Re: Intimate Bench scene

alright! heres the final.

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btw, I've encountered a problem after i submitted it, it doesnt seems to play the last 20 frames or so, the video just stops at around frame 300 with audio still playing...any ideas?

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