Stepping into the spline stage. Still seemed abit floaty at some parts. Could help with the pin pointing of where it is

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After a long weekend, another update! This time i fixed her bouncy eyeballs which is a real problem in the previous block. And now its less bouncy! Also with the eye lids and also the brow. Brow's something wrong, cant pin point it. Any comments?

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Last edited by ElDrith (09-17-2012 5:12 am)

Hey! I like what you're doing here. I think you should try to slow some of the movements down a bit and make things a little more steady and smooth. Right now I think her head and eyes are moving a bit too much and her fingers do strange things (near the end). Maybe delete some of those movements and have some points where she holds her head still for a while and focuses on something (you already start doing this here and there but might want to push it some more). I understand she's supposed to look nervous but It doesn't feel right just yet... keep it up

Yeah, definitely agree with jabob.  Too much going on. I don't know what to look at, especially when she starts gesturing with both hands, my eyes are bouncing all over.  You need to focus on an area for your audience to look at, and act within that.  You can change the focus, but consciously choose where the audience's eyes should be.  My acting teacher would like to refer to charlie chaplin for this a lot, for example, if he wanted to take something out of his pocket, he wouldn't simply just put it in and take it out like a normal person would normally- he put his hand in, and shook it to catch the audience's attention.  Obviously you wouldn't go to  that extreme here, but this dialogue to me seems it would be a lot more powerful if most of the animation was in the eyes.  I liked the nervous wrapping of the fingers, though.

I think you could go tighter on this woman too with the camera.  We really don't need to see the blank wall on the left or the empty space on the desk.  I think you should somehow fit story in here too, perhaps with some type of prop.. it feels very much like a student exercise when there's nothing else that helps convey some type of story.

Great critiques guys, thanks a lot, been busy with part time past few days, couldnt catch up on this.

@ElPollo; I do agree with the fingers especially the hand doing some weird stuff, will be trying to fix it on the next update! but aye, the eyes are moving too much? cuz i would like to convey a more... nervouse movement.

@jabobob; The first few for the starting part as of the head? also im not very sure of what you're trying to say "peaks of the dialogue"

@babji3; yeap, still playing around with the graphs here, thanks

@Quinnel; the eyes? Okay, will try to put some emotion into that thanks for the tip

Last edited by ElDrith (09-23-2012 5:19 pm)

Hi Eldrith,

When she says "May be tomorrow", it looks as if there is no lip sync, its just moves randomly and very fast too.

Mani

If you can find time to tweak the lips on the first and second "maybe", it would really help. Also, around 9 seconds, her pose seems very un-natural the way its looking up past the camera. I would consider tweaking the head position there, or just cut straight to the part where shes looking down and hold that pose a little longer instead. Goodluck!

Last edited by auriarvin (09-26-2012 3:15 pm)

Hey guys thanks for the last few replies. Will work on it and hopefully everything goes well with rendering!

Cheers