#1 09-17-2012 7:51 pm

JonGrzybowski
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Cancer patient

blocking out the big stuff.
What do you think?
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#2 09-18-2012 1:06 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

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#3 09-18-2012 2:08 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

Hey man - quite awesome job there ! but im not really sure bout the expression at " the right to live a little ..." some how it feel like hes turning hes body to his left side and a head to right - I think its not clean - of course just a suggestion - stretch a body make it rotate towards camera ( hes right ) ... but anyways - love the drawings and concept !
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#4 09-18-2012 3:09 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

thanks sloik,  As for the pose, its ment to be an anticipation movement.  maybe its cleaner in this version.
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#5 09-18-2012 8:01 pm

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#6 09-19-2012 2:29 pm

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#7 09-19-2012 6:29 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

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#8 09-20-2012 8:24 pm

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#9 09-21-2012 10:34 am

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Re: Cancer patient

Hey, the part were she says "I've Earned" the pose seems a little bit to extreme, I would soften then pose.

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#10 09-21-2012 2:47 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

Good catch ashley!  thanks.  I added the soften before the pose,  tell me if this helps;

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#11 09-21-2012 8:51 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

todays progress so far;

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#12 09-22-2012 12:39 am

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Re: Cancer patient

Watch your measurements for the arms.There is a lot of scaling happening guessin in the first part. But i think your ok on that. another thing i think the character seems to be looking at two people One on the left side of the death bed and the other thoating the camera. Will you please clarify?

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#13 09-22-2012 12:18 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

Frame 180 is still too extreme, maybe lower her head and have her look up. Its just that she looks terrified but the voice is rather more sad sounding.

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#14 09-22-2012 4:41 pm

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Re: Cancer patient

Eddie:  Yeah i know i have a lot of scaling to fix.  Mostly in the hands and wrists.
As for her looking side to side im trying to show her frantic panic in accepting death.  Then when she turns to camera she is seeking comfort in the viewer.

Ashley;  Ahhh I get your crit now.  However I want her to show fear.  My take on the sound bit is she is scared not sad.  But I would like to hear your argument otherwise.

Here is the finished clean up pass

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