#1 09-03-2012 5:20 pm

DougEves
Registered: 08-21-2012
Posts: 2

Rough storyboard for Septembers entry

Hey everyone!

This months going to be my first entry into the competition.  My short is of a young woman having a conversation with a shadowed figure in the background.  She is sitting down in the foreground.  I had a lot of trouble developing the look for this female character, mainly because I don't sketch women as much as I should.  The following images are a rough storyboard for the sequence.

Here is the first page of my storyboard:

http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m9sap2ouRa1qfrvi3o1_500.jpg

And here is the last page:

http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m9sap2ouRa1qfrvi3o2_500.jpg

Leave me some feedback yawl!

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#2 09-03-2012 6:26 pm

ctedin1
Registered: 09-04-2011
Posts: 12

Re: Rough storyboard for Septembers entry

Not bad so far. I'd change her head angles around a bit more. Seems like she is holding it unnaturally still. For female faces, lighen the upper eyebrow a lot more. Increase the space between the eyebrow and upper eyelid (this is where the makeup goes.) ;-) Also, make the mouth a bit narrower. Slightly smaller ears. This should help givie it a more feminine look.

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#3 09-03-2012 7:36 pm

Martial_Armand_Fontan
From: Poitiers - France
Registered: 08-24-2012
Posts: 4

Re: Rough storyboard for Septembers entry

The face to "I've earned the right to" is too "villain" and different compared to the rest.

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#4 09-04-2012 5:09 am

DougEves
Registered: 08-21-2012
Posts: 2

Re: Rough storyboard for Septembers entry

Thanks for the words guys, I'll have a play around with the points you've all mentioned.  thanks again big_smile

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