#1 08-12-2012 9:42 pm

StoobyToons
From: Seattle, WA
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The Stars (August '12 WIP)

So, this is my first go at the 11 Second Club.
I'm going for something very dialed back, subtle, and intimate. Feedback is much appreciated!

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#2 08-14-2012 4:24 pm

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Here's my next pass. Added a few breakdowns to help with arcs and a bit more detail on what's happening with the hand gesture.

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#3 08-14-2012 4:48 pm

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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

I like it. Simple idea focusing on facial animation and lip sync. I plan on doing something similar. I usually try to come up with something unique if I can but this month I plan on focusing on creating good animation. Your blocking is looking good. Because it is mostly subtle it's hard to tell too much right now, but you seem to be on the right track.

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#4 08-14-2012 4:53 pm

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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

I agree with wellings. I like the idea of focusing on facial acting with more subtle body movements, but until you have some key poses laid out for the expressions, it's hard to give much critique.

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#5 08-14-2012 7:27 pm

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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Lookin promising. IF you are gonna focus on really capturing one straight-on character, make sure to tweak everything. As said above, I look forward to seeing some facial animation, then we will get a better sense of your scene.

For now, make sure that when his shoulders are moving, his hand is reacting to that at least a little bit. Right now when his hand is not gesturing, it is Nailed down in place. Even if his hand is planted, be sure to give it a tiny bit of moving hold while it is at rest and his torso is moving.

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#6 08-14-2012 7:50 pm

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Awesome feedback, guys! I should have a new post tonight. smile

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#7 08-14-2012 8:04 pm

pollywoggles
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

I agree with the others.  So far it is looking good, but since this piece is really about working within a single body pose, with the acting carried in the facial animation, I can't really say much until I see the face blocked.  Looking forward to your next post!


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#8 08-16-2012 4:09 pm

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Sorry for the delay on my facial blocking, everybody. Here's what I've got so far:

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#9 08-17-2012 5:56 pm

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

At this point, I'm beginning to refine the shot. You'll notice I've gone ahead and converted to spline mode. This is to help get a better sense of timing and arcs and where I need to place any new breakdowns, should they be needed. Since this is primarily an acting shot with much of the focus on the face, I've started to add a few main beats for the lip sync.


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#10 08-18-2012 9:49 am

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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

disturbing the sholders.


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#11 08-21-2012 5:07 am

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Next pass.

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#12 08-21-2012 8:22 am

doffer
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Nice shot

Just one note about his left shoulder, the one with the hand on the pole/stub.
With the first move about 1-2 seconds in, where he goes from screen left to screen right, I think it would look nice, if the shoulder reacted on the weight. I would start the shoulder a bit lower, and as he leans in on his arm, I would raise it.

Otherwise, looking really good. Nice and simple idea


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#13 08-21-2012 8:39 pm

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Cool! Thanks, doffer. I like that idea. smile

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#14 08-22-2012 6:24 am

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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Hey Stooby,

Try adding a couple ease in frames on 0.05. There are some sharp movements. Sometimes we may not see them right away because as animators we become too close to our animations and look past the snap or the pop. Your poses are good. Just try loosening up the transitions between one to the other. Your shot can also benefit from some arcs. Especially in the way the audiences eye tracks the face. ie "I own the stage" You have some great accents in there.. (the way the head moves to the words) Push it a little more and it will really sell your ideas.

From 0.01 - 0.02 - There are some curve issues. It looks like the character is hitting a wall twice. smooth out those curves and lead with the body and drag with the head. ( Keeping the eyes on the character off screen, leading with the body will tie up the first thought as it transitions into the next ) That will loosen it up and be a good example of where to take the rest of the shot.

And add an ease out with the blink just before 0.07. Its a little harsh and the timing feels twinned.

Good work. Keep it up!

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#15 08-27-2012 2:36 am

StoobyToons
From: Seattle, WA
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

Getting some pretty great feedback from folks. Keep it coming!
Here's my polishing pass. For the weekend:

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#16 08-29-2012 4:26 am

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

JUST about ready to submit this guy. Any last minute suggestions and critiques would definitely be valued!

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#17 08-29-2012 4:44 am

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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

good you died down the yellow jacket. Its now a earthtone for the log. Just dream a minute, This would be great for the scene if you had a movie and this is your ending of a scene. You would had the scene planned out for the ending of him all alone talking.

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#18 08-29-2012 5:56 pm

StoobyToons
From: Seattle, WA
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

eddie j wrote:

good you died down the yellow jacket. Its now a earthtone for the log. Just dream a minute, This would be great for the scene if you had a movie and this is your ending of a scene. You would had the scene planned out for the ending of him all alone talking.

Yes, the yellow jacket was quite distracting and inappropriate for the scene, I felt.
I could definitely see a scene like this playing out during the second act of a film just before the grand finale.

So, just so I'm covering my bases, how are my arcs, rhythm, and lip sync looking, everybody? I'm going to tie this baby up tonight! big_smile

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#19 08-30-2012 4:31 am

StoobyToons
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Re: The Stars (August '12 WIP)

I do believe this will be about my final pass before render and submission. Thanks for all of the kind words and the feedback! This has been a fun experience!

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