if you're attempting a heavy object exercise, i would suggest making the box he's holding a little heavier ... currently it looks like something he can lift without REAL effort ... the heavier the box gets, the more arched the spine will be, the more contrast in the actions you'll get.....
ps - to make this one heavier, make it fall down a bit after the box leaves the surface of the table.

Might be nice to see him turn and start to walk away. Looks good so far.

Cheers guys I worked more on that shot but have left it now! (it was very boring to me) So here is a acting piece I am currently blocking out.

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Lemme know what you think etc. Also quicktime seems to have made the audio come up ahead of where it should be.

Another update, all linear and still fairly rough. lip sync blocked and no facial expressions yet. Also does anyone know why quicktime is throwing of my sync so much?, I've had this before but forgot how I fixed it!

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Cheers people

Hey Leoman,
I like where this is going!
Right now it seems like all the characters actions are segmented. They don't flow into each other which makes them all feel very "posed". In some cases you might actually want this (like the sigh right after he closes the door or the "woo") but in most i would say you need to make his actions feel like they flow into each other better.
Also, i'd say push the poses on the "woo!" and on the "not easy" line to be a bit more dramatic. I feel like they are still kinda ehhh...

Cheers!

Just starting up a new piece. I'm looking for some advice on compostion on this one before I really start blocking out. This is what I am thinking at the moment.

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The idea is that they are police interrogators talking to the suspect on the other side of the table. Do you think it would be better to show a third person? maybe with an over the shoulder shot or something?
hmm looking at it now I think I would flip this so standing guy is on the other side

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I prefer option 2, but without the character on the left showing keep up the good work!

update, started blocking, couple of inbetweens in some places

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Had to be quite honest with myself and change it, felt like the change between poses was too extreme on the guy to the left, here is an updated version (linear not spline)

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Update for today, got it all to linear and added a couple more mouth shapes

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Any ideas?

Devilbrush wrote:

Hey,

Cool idea, i like it !

As I always say, I ' m still a student so take carefully my words !

Here some things that pop to me :

The first pose has something that doesn't convince me so much. I think his pelvis and his spine should be more rotate towards the other guy, right now is completely facing the camera, so i would suggest a slightly twist on his spine, so we can also see some silhouette, because right now it ' s pretty flat.

I don't understand why at frame 41 the red guy looks into the camera, maybe is something that you want to do or maybe not but in my opinion he should look at the third character from the beginning.

The movement of the right arm from frame 80  to frame 100 seems awkward to me. He moves the arm until frame 93, that he completely stops and just the forearm moves for the last 6 frames. What you want to do is correct but i think that maybe you have an unnecessary key on the arm and looks like a pop to me.

You maybe may want to add a breakdowns in between frame 100 and frame 120 for the left arm: right now if you focus on the path that the hand is doing is linear. With a breakdowns you can reach a really nice arc there. For the other arm maybe you want to use few frames for a small anticipation of the hand, right now Malcom is going from pose A to pose B, the timing of the action is even and could be more snappy for me.

I ' m a little bit concern about the last pose. You are shifting the weight from the left leg to the right leg, but you are not showing this shifting with the spine. So i think you could maybe push the line of action of the spine in the last pose, to have a better silhouette.

And maybe it could be cool if you can put two bones in that block notes just to make it less stiff!!


Cheers and i hope it helps.

Thanks Devilbrush! Great critique. I should be posting an updated version of this shot tomorrow at some point.

Walk cycle practice..

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