11 Second Club - Forums

SavannaW · 06-04-2012 3:52 pm

Hi, everyone! This is my first time doing this competition. I'm an animation student in college, so I've got less than a year of experience and am hoping to learn a lot from everyone's critiques.

I'm just in the early blocking stages, but I wanted to see what everyone thought of the poses before I started breaking things down more.

Direct Link

Raccoon Rezillo · 06-05-2012 3:35 pm

It may help to have frames on the video but besides that you got some good gestures.

The one with the guy that is talking, puts his hand to his chest as he says, "men get to fighting." It felt a little odd to me. Either it's the pose or he moves too much there but may become clearer when you get more in-betweens or more done so I like to know what others may say on it before wanting to change that.

Timing looks to be good at this stage. Keep it up!

Last edited by Raccoon Rezillo (06-05-2012 6:06 pm)

SavannaW · 06-10-2012 9:52 pm

Thanks for the tips! On the "men get to fighting" pose, his hand was actually away from his chest, but I think it was hard to tell because there is no lighting. I've adjusted the pose so that it is more readable, added in more inbetweens, and put in a frame count.

SavannaW · 06-10-2012 9:55 pm

Here's an update on my animation. I read through all the tip articles on this site and learned some great things! I especially like the idea of "owning" more frames than the computer, or at least doing more detailed blocking when in stepped mode. Usually, I would have splined directly after making the poses in my last video, but I think splineing what I have now will look better (and be easier to work with).

Please critique!

Direct Link

SteWhite · 06-10-2012 10:49 pm

looks good! I think on the 'it happens here' where he points below, his left arm just looks a bit odd to me, also he should do the hand gesture for 'one' a little sooner

the 'fighting' arm looks a lot better now reads clearer

I am only a recent graduate though so my insight won't be as good as some of the people on here

good luck!

exorio · 06-12-2012 10:02 pm

It's probably just my taste and habit but... the "2 man enter 1 man leaves" finger poses (posing 2 finger for "two" etc) seems kinda predictable for me.

And you seem to be quite hesitant with the poses... almost like you're playing it very safe... thus the whole thing become less interesting

also becareful with the blue guy's poses (specially on the neck on frame 122 and end)

hope that helps

cheers!

Last edited by exorio (06-12-2012 10:04 pm)

SavannaW · 06-13-2012 2:38 am

Thanks for the critiques! SteWhite, I agree that the left arm could use some tweaking. And you're completely right about the timing on the "one" hand gesture.

Exorio, could you explain a bit more about how the poses look? I was trying to push them, without going too over the top. Do you think they need to be pushed further?

exorio · 06-13-2012 3:50 am

Why not? I mean, personally I always feel it's better to push it over the top first then tone it down afterwards.

It's animation... just let it all out and make it fun. Unless you really pursuing for a very realistic feel for it.

cheers

MattJ · 06-13-2012 4:11 am

Not sure they need pushed more, rather explored more. Like exorio said, it all feels very safe. Maybe bring the guy screen right and around the other side, or start on the left and bring him right. Make the action of the one noticeable and entertaining to watch. Utilize your screen-space as best as possible and exaggerate the movements to really bring out the personality and character in them.
Keep going and good luck!

Matt -

shaggybreeks · 06-13-2012 2:23 pm

Hey looking really nice. Pretty solid stuff for your first entry. I like the subtlety of it. The poses have strength, but theyre not flamboyant which is nice. My only critique would be the framing. I think you could crop a lot closer into the two characters. Make it more a mid shot. Itll make the whole animation feel a lot more personal.
keep up the good work

SavannaW · 06-20-2012 10:25 pm

Thanks for all the help, everyone! I've followed your suggestions and made a number of changes, including cropping in closer, making the guy in red walk into the shot, and trying to make the poses more interesting. It's all splined out now, and I cleaned the curves. All I've got left to do is the lipsync.

Tell me what you think!

Direct Link

SavannaW · 06-28-2012 10:41 pm

Everything is done now. Thanks for everyone's help! Any last critiques before I submit it?

Direct Link

#1 06-04-2012 3:52 pm

My June Competition WIP

#2 06-05-2012 3:35 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#3 06-10-2012 9:52 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#4 06-10-2012 9:55 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#5 06-10-2012 10:49 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#6 06-12-2012 10:02 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#7 06-13-2012 2:38 am

Re: My June Competition WIP

#8 06-13-2012 3:50 am

Re: My June Competition WIP

#9 06-13-2012 4:11 am

Re: My June Competition WIP

#10 06-13-2012 2:23 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#11 06-20-2012 10:25 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

#12 06-28-2012 10:41 pm

Re: My June Competition WIP

Board footer