U mean zoom n or out?

I'll try my hand at critiquing.  I hope you don't get angry.


First thing,
You will need some Spine rotation on X and Y and Z overall in the entire animation to reduce the bobble Head feel.

I noticed was how he gestures with his pinky and ring finger while holding firmly on the apple.  It feels awkward and unnatural.  It would work if it was a smaller object (like a cigg).  I would remove this gesture with fingers on frame 7-29 but keep the finger gesture on the second part.

"I chose a half measure" Frame 74-81.  Hand is gesturing forward while the head starts to rotate forward then rotates backwards. I would just keep his initial rotation forward and keep it slowly going forward. It would better support the action of the arm.  Also the gesturing arm should have some shoulder animation as he points.


88-121 The arm with the apple is holding that pose for too long (over 40 frames)
Add a moving hold to it.

110-121 his left arm is sliding.

123-138. Animate the shoulder as the arm gestures.

150-156 clavicle/shoulder needs to start rotating up.

158-161 left hand clips his leg.  Perhaps swing his arm forward after the push off to get a nice arc leading up to the apple hand off.

163-166 both hands intersect each other

167-170 His Right hand intersects again.  Also watch the arc on his hand.  The hand goes on a linear path. Also rotate the joint at the elbow to relax the arm as it swings down.

180-190  He is looking stiff. Need more compression on that spine and drag the head. 

196-201. The arc of the arm isn't working because the hand is foreshortened to the camera.  Perhaps he raises his arm the opposite arc going away from the body up towards the chest?

274-300 Need to loosen up that arm. Follow through and offset some keyes to loosen it up.

274-281 Head just pivots on its axis.  Need to rotate the spine and neck.

Check your blinks.  They are blinking too slow and mechanical.

I hope that helps.  Good luck.

yes what hornerjimmy said..I mean zoom in...currently there's a lot of empty space around your character that doesn't really serve a purpose...zooming it will allow us to focus on him more

Direct Link

here is small changes of the shot,wants critics to go forward.