Very sinister... I like it!

Rico Boy wrote:

if you don't have much time to work on this then why are you adding lights, models and textures. All of that time could have been spent making your animation better. I think you need to go back and spend more time making the animation stronger over all.

If i can get it good enough I'll use it for my review, so just looking for some quick feedback, lights take like 3 seconds, and most of the models I have in a morgue file. with lights objects and the fire it MAY have taken me 15 minutes

wolfor wrote:

I tend to think along rico's thoughts, but I think in this case much of the story would not be understandable without the lighting, right?

pretty much yeah, I wanted this to be a fairly introspective piece. so the lighting plays a pretty pivitol role. now its just a matter of fixing up the timing and smoothing out the motions

+strong ending
+good solid camera
  (I'm thinking you could stretch the bar and try to even get tighter and maybe lower it and rotate it up a bit...
   ...for that more powerful, intimate, feel? what do you think?)
+your timing seems to be pretty decent

-when he hits the table; his hand motion needs to be a bit smaller, a bit quicker, and definitely more impact when he
makes contact. (OR... you could have him "raise his glass to the camera" instead of hitting the table at that section?)
-if you want to keep what he's doing AFTER drinking the shot; then you need to fix his hand/wrist/elbow pose before putting
down the shot glass; his hand/wrist/elbow look broken. (this is what I would have done: have him wipe his mouth
with his LF_Hand after drinking the shot. then when he puts the shot glass down and reacts to the liquor for a brief second.)
-watch his RT_Hand when going to grab for the knife; his hand passes in front of or close to his face; lower it a bit and have
his fingers stretch out as he goes to grab the knife.
-his LF_Hand, when going to turn out the candle, is broken; rotate it so it looks natural. (always try to mimic what your character
is doing; if it doesn't hurt or strain when mimicking his Hand Poses, then you're pretty close to have good "Hand Positions")

great progress.... keep going!
Cheers!

Last edited by ricekrispyninja (03-08-2012 11:39 pm)

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Wow, it looks really good. The lighting adds a lot to it. Something feels off when he extinguishes the camera however - maybe make the motion of his hand a little smoother, and get rid of that period between when he reaches up to the candle and when his fingers come together?

I like it, but the movement feels a little mechanical.