#1 03-13-2018 6:26 pm

m_carril
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From: Montreal, Canada
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Old School March 2018 - WIP

I guess it still needs some polish.. Would like to know where to start. Critics and comments welcome.


https://youtu.be/6lECflQxl9o

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#2 03-13-2018 9:58 pm

Crayon10
Registered: 11-20-2010
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP

Did you reference yourself doing the dialogue? I like the body language, fits the script.

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#3 03-15-2018 5:15 pm

meaghansketch
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP

It would be nice if the guy reacts a little sooner on "no!" (after "what, you walk around naked?") - right now it feels a little late.  You could have him finish the move before he delivers the line.  I also feel like he should react a little after "we're good then" - how does he feel about this lizard moving into his space?  He is a little blank.  Keep going, this is looking good and I like the idea!

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#4 03-19-2018 1:49 pm

ericraffle
From: South Africa
Registered: 02-03-2012
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP


Good Luck !! And happy animating to all

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#5 03-19-2018 1:54 pm

ericraffle
From: South Africa
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP

i agree with what meaghansketch said, another thing to consider  is the lizard is a lot smaller, either over exaggerate his mouth movements or bring the camera in closer for the lizard.


Good Luck !! And happy animating to all

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#6 03-19-2018 3:24 pm

m_carril
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From: Montreal, Canada
Registered: 07-01-2010
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP

Thanks for the input, ericraffle and meaghansketch. Gonna adress that on polishing pass.
Hey Crayon10, I did not film reference for this one. Just sketched thumbnaisl on paper.

Cheers!

Last edited by m_carril (03-19-2018 3:57 pm)

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#7 03-30-2018 2:27 am

GrandviewWorkshop
From: Colorado
Registered: 03-29-2018
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP

Very nice! I'm new to this, and would like to vote, but can't seem to. Does anyone here know how to vote on an animation?


Love isn't a decision. It's a feeling. If we could decide who we loved, it would be much simpler, but much less magical.
~Trey Parker

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#8 03-31-2018 3:34 pm

m_carril
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From: Montreal, Canada
Registered: 07-01-2010
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Re: Old School March 2018 - WIP

Thanks GrandviewWorkshop,

I appreciate it. Voting will be between April 1st and 5th. You can read about it here:


http://www.11secondclub.com/home/FAQ#voting

Cheers

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