#1 02-12-2017 5:00 am

MIKENTNZ
Registered: 02-10-2017
Posts: 11

FEB 2017 WIP

This is my first blockout for the Feb 2017 competition. Any feedback is welcomed and greatly appreciated.

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#2 02-17-2017 1:38 am

lelostrzal
Registered: 02-12-2017
Posts: 14

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Hi Mikentnz, I like your setting.

I have some thoughts.
One idea is to make his body move more. It looks like only his hands are moving (is that intentional?).
I think that camera position could be improved. The first shot, of the mirror, is dead centered and far. For me it was difficult to understand. perhaps If you just move it a little bit to the right and change a little the angle. The next shot also has a similar centered position.
You could use the Rule of Thirds (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rule_of_thirds).

https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/c5/6c/21/c56c21b869da5b414d8e60ac970e2d79.jpg

The shot of your male character could have a little more space between his head and the top edge of the screen.

Overall I like it very much. Good job.

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#3 02-20-2017 2:05 am

MIKENTNZ
Registered: 02-10-2017
Posts: 11

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Thanks for the feedback. I took your advice and took it into consideration in my second pass of the animation.

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#4 02-20-2017 2:08 am

MIKENTNZ
Registered: 02-10-2017
Posts: 11

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Here is an update of my WIP. Same as before, any feedback is welcomed.

https://youtu.be/WviId5O_g_U

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#5 02-20-2017 6:44 pm

BMitch
From: Viborg, Denmark
Registered: 09-04-2014
Posts: 11

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Hello!
Overall at this stage animation seems well smile I would recommend you to give rid of that first shot, it is not adding necessary information to your story. (but it's up to you what to do with it) If you keep it make that we see the woman on left side and man on the right, since this is how they stay throughout all your animation.
The second shot (when man says "worked for" it would be nice to rotate the camera so that the characters don't get squeezed  in the left part of the screen, give them some air. It might be that you will not even need the cut when woman says "can I ask" (you might use the same camera angle).
Woman facial expression is a bit aggressive, at first I thought she will jump on him. The problem might be in the eyebrows, maybe relax them a bit smile
The guy feels in the zen mode, very relaxed which is nice, but maybe find a way to make him less floaty, maybe some hip/chest movement to define the beats.
Good luck!

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#6 02-21-2017 1:43 am

wheels77art
Registered: 01-25-2017
Posts: 2

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Hello!
So far its looking like you're making some awesome progress. Overall I think everything is reading a little floaty, especially in the hands. Its hard to tell right now if they are moving at the correct timings with the rest of the body because they are floating from pose to pose. If you can put a few holds in there and move his hands on the beat with his body, it'll look great. I definitely love the attitudes of both your characters! I can definitely tell which one is which and its reading well. Great job so far and I wish you the best of luck!

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#7 02-22-2017 12:56 am

m4ng0
Registered: 01-25-2017
Posts: 2

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Hello MIKENTNZ!

Looking great so far for your WIP! There are a lot of floaty movements here and there. You can simply fix that by putting more pauses/holds so the character would have time to breathe rather than having each poses happening at once. Both character interacting is pretty good and they both have different personalities! Keep it up!

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#8 02-22-2017 9:54 am

vimal
Registered: 09-26-2011
Posts: 63

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

chk your blocking pass in step mode..that will help u a lot in delivering a better performance....

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#9 02-26-2017 5:12 am

MIKENTNZ
Registered: 02-10-2017
Posts: 11

Re: FEB 2017 WIP

Here is some more progress i have managed to make on the animation.


https://youtu.be/OdTpsEZL4Wk

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