#1 09-05-2012 11:29 pm

andrhez
Registered: 09-05-2012
Posts: 3

september_Comment please

Hi!

Here is my work in progress, the idea is that she is talking to a bottle of poison, reflecting about her suicide Please comment!!

Thank you!

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#2 09-06-2012 9:24 am

abhisek.mis2@gmail.com
From: india
Registered: 08-03-2012
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Re: september_Comment please

hi.....smile
just make the grip properly, otherwise it looks  like she is trying to make balance with the  bottle . spacialy at the last part.....smile

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#3 09-06-2012 10:22 am

Monkey G
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Re: september_Comment please

I think that's what Andrhez is trying to do... make it balance on the hand?

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#4 09-06-2012 3:10 pm

andrhez
Registered: 09-05-2012
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Re: september_Comment please

Yes that is my idea, that she is doing balance with the bottle, thank you for your comments, soon I will upload another advance!

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#5 09-06-2012 6:56 pm

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Re: september_Comment please

If the bottle weighs much of anything, holding it like that for the full clip would be TORTURE on the wrist, so you might want to do the balance thing at first, but then have her change to a more comfortable grip. Right now all my attention went to the swaying bottle, with no real attention paid to the character herself. You probably want the focus to be the character, so get the bottle out of the spotlight. smile


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#6 09-06-2012 11:56 pm

mmart
Registered: 04-18-2011
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Re: september_Comment please

Her lip sync doesn't look right. I think she is making the "o" lips too much. It just looks off. Maybe try not to move her lips so much. It  should be pretty subtle.

What is her character? Is she sad, happy, disappointed? Is she thinking about drinking the bottle?

I like the idea. It is very simple, but could have a big impact. Good job so far.

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