#1 08-25-2012 2:52 am

adigan
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augist wip - 2 days work so far

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please review the main guys animation and camera angles .  suggestions for anything else wud also be welcomed ....

thanks guys..  smile

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#2 08-25-2012 3:02 am

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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

Camera wise, I have no idea what the pan down is supposed to be showing.  Also, the first and second shots are the exact same distance and height which doesn't give any new information.  Try making one of the shots a medium close up from the chest up, move the camera closer to the ground a tilt it up a little and it should be a more powerful shot.


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#3 08-25-2012 4:40 am

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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

thanks very very much.... will soon upload the vid with new changes and powerful camera angles ....thanx again mate smile

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#4 08-26-2012 7:53 am

adigan
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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

WIP 2

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again ......... every comment wud be appreciated smile

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#5 08-28-2012 4:19 am

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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

Awesome, it's really coming along.  The last really powerful line "I owned the stage" is completely lost while we are looking at his knees tongue   A crossfade of him saying the line then face into the case with money?  I think you really need to show him delivering that line even if you have to remove the shot of the case.


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#6 08-28-2012 7:37 pm

adigan
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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

ok.... thanx again  smile ....  this right here is almost what the final animation wud luk like,... i don't think i'll be getting any more time to work on this one.... got only 4-5 days for this....  sad

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#7 08-29-2012 2:43 pm

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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

cool youve come a long way since the start. just a few things. the second shot would look a lot better if it was the same angle as the first just a close up. what you are doing now is known as crossing the line in film terminology and is a big no no for the future. also i think you can put some more reaction into the other person sitting next to him. last thing is the pick up of the guitar seems floaty. just tighten that up a bit. all and all it looks good! great job! :-P


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#8 08-30-2012 5:51 pm

adigan
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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

ok ... so here's the final draft.... but hey theres still some time after my office hours ....for corrections....
so pour in some suggestions (if any) ....  thanx

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#9 08-30-2012 7:13 pm

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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

Its looking good but obviously there is still a lot that could be done. Firstly the lip sync feels off, especially at "live my dream" i really cant feel the 'mmm' sound in 'my' or the 'drr' sound in dream. I would slightly delay the hand gesture so his creates a fist on "dream" instead of "i live". When he reaches for the guitar I think his body should rotate more towards it and perhaps make him lean back in anticipation of picking the guitar up. As it stands the guitar seems like it weighs nothing which is a waste of an opportunity to demonstrate some good body mechanics.

I really like the facial acting and the movement in his legs, plus the overall concept is great. Keep animating smile

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#10 08-31-2012 6:09 am

adigan
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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

k.... thank you very much for your comments.... i`ll surely work on those before submitting tonight...   smile

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#11 08-31-2012 11:25 pm

adigan
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Re: augist wip - 2 days work so far

smile. . . here's my final piece for august 2012.... thanx everybody for your comments ... i know its not upto the mark yet... but I'll get there sooner or later wink ..... keep animating

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