I really love the closeness you've got going on, with the book and arm around the girl. Great idea! I think the camera moves are not needed, so I'd consider taking them out (at least two of them). Also three cuts in 11 seconds, for an audio that's so laid back, is a bit much. You might consider doing it in less, and really let the animation stand on its own two feet.

Good luck with it, keep going!

I don't think the closeness is at all over exaggerated but well anything more than this and it will go into the weird part...
Ah the tv and media today has corrupted our minds to this extent....lol What could be wrong with a grandpa hugging his grand child? O.o

xD

Thanks.

Great idea! it's one of those ideas that would normally pop up in someone's head when they hear the dialogue.

off topic, but where did you get those rigs? did you build them?

more progress:

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Thanks! Yes, the lipsync isn't quite there yet. But its timing is fine, right? And where do you think I should tone down the curling? Any sound in specific or that whole bit?

Looks really good!  For more detail focus on the brows and eyes.  The top eyelid naturally stay close to the top of the iris, no matter where the eye is looking.  It's especially obvious in the first few seconds, the old guy's eyes make him look like he's seen a ghost and doesn't match the other parts of his face.  Watch out for floaty lids, the bottom does this a few times, especially around "I owned the stage"

The brows are way too lively.  They need to match the rest of the face's movement and expression and right now they are trying to put emphasis every other word which doesn't feel believable.

Lastly, his hips and shoulders are at the exact same angle and it looks like his spine is bent in half!  Offset them and it will look like he has more weight.  Also, all the body movements are from the top of the chest.  Try moving like that in real life, you can't   When you're sitting try and lean over and touch the ground and you'll see how much your hips and chest move to balance you out.   It's very easy to forget about the hips and balance of the body when it's close to or off screen but it's effects are still visible.  "I owned the stage"  Add some root, and lower back rotation when he moves forward for the anticipation and when he leans back.   Here's a great example of what I'm talking about

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ok.. not sure what you are saying, but thanks for the comment?

thank you!
i think i don't have any more time to work on this now.. but thank you all for your help.