#1 08-06-2012 6:44 pm

amincgi
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WIP August Competiton 2012_Amin Sadeghvand

Here is my work , all comments welcome!

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#2 08-06-2012 7:37 pm

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Re: WIP August Competiton 2012_Amin Sadeghvand

Interesting concept! The cut is very jarring, and that may be because you've got a truck out into another truck out. That can be very tricky to pull off. I'd say lose one of the zoom effects (or both) and see how that works out. It fits alright for the audio, but having the cut in between is too much of a jump.


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#3 08-06-2012 7:48 pm

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Re: WIP August Competiton 2012_Amin Sadeghvand

tnx for your help .

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#4 08-07-2012 8:05 pm

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Re: WIP August Competiton 2012_Amin Sadeghvand

edit concept smile

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#5 08-07-2012 8:41 pm

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Re: WIP August Competiton 2012_Amin Sadeghvand

Looks better. When he turns his head you want to let his shoulders turn a bit as well.


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#6 08-29-2012 7:05 pm

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Re: WIP August Competiton 2012_Amin Sadeghvand

k looks good so far. first off make him look at the girl when hes talking to her. then look up or away when he talks of the stars. the rest is fine :-P


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