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Thinking with Portals

by Vito

Final Rating: 5.05. Finished 39 out of 164 entries.

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Animator: Vito

Description: A lab assistant has some things to say about the Doctor's new invention.

Experience: 3-ish years

Time taken: 2 weeks

Comments:

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William Barry Eggington:

Nicely cleaned up from your WIP. I like how you use the subtle rack focus. Good job!

Danny Kneip:

Blender!! I've never worked with the Cookie Rig, but I've tried. And I'll leave it at that. :)

Amusing concept, nicely animated and great camera angles. This really works.

I think the lip sync could benefit from additional polishing, and the final "jump" at the end lacks fundamentals of gravity, inertia, anticipation, etc.

Beyond those, both performances are subtle and really good, overall.

Louis Parker:

Love the idea just slightly stiff

Rosalia:

really nice idea and camera shots.

Ian Alexander Hanson:

Cool concept and decent execution with camera changes.

Facials could exaggerate more, jump at the end is not weighted enough with anticipation / squash. Both last poses are pretty twisty and unnatural.

Michael Kristiansen:

a little more extreme expressions would suit it.

Terressa:

Funny. The camera angles and composition are working well here. The take is not working, it does not feel believable, not enough anticipation, squash and stretch or follow through to work. The arm flails are too over the top for this composition. The rest of the acting is working really well, very believable, very dynamic, lost of squash and stretch, overlapping action, settles, pauses. Facial animations are working well, lifelike and believable. Doc's walk in is lacking up and down and contrapposto actions and is therefor too stiff. I"m not sure if its the rig but some of Doc's poses, especially toward the end don't look correct, like its broken. Also, for the close up on Marty, it is not good to crop the top of the head, try pulling the camera back a bit.

Nathan Younger:

good camera, needs more facial polish

Tyson Haeh:

Cool idea, animation is really lacking though