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Experimental Vacuum Factory

by Douglas Anderson

Final Rating: 5.18. Finished 36 out of 164 entries.

458 views including the voting period.

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Animator: Douglas Anderson

Description: Phil talks to a Scientist about the new vacuum.

Experience: Years

Time taken: a month, Nights and weekends.

Comments:

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Danny Kneip:

A good hand drawn effort! Many of the gestures are repeated, but the lip sync is pretty good. When you cut to Doc's line, you've jumped the 180 line of action and it is terribly jarring to the viewer. Additionally, you've crammed both characters into the left-most side of the screen, unnecessarily. And obviously, when one character stops speaking, he's frozen. Overall, I think it's a pretty good job.

Sharath Kumar:

LOL!!!!! really nicely done!!!

Ian Alexander Hanson:

Pretty cool - always appreciate 2D drawn.

shot jumps confusing, don't like how static everything is. This guy should move around but slowly. Seems a bit hyper.

ro crown:

so at frame 276 the doc has no pupils and his finger is bent for the wrong reason, and did you know about the general rule of movie making, that you never cross over from one point of view to the other from an invisiable line of if two char's are here and then you switch camera angles and put them from left to right as from right to left the audiece is disoritented.........
Would hope to see more from you.
This is a beginner and that's ok,
the char's are of the stiff one page and the move on variety stage.
Practice warmup doodles of say 25-50pgs per day and see how much looser your pencil and or tablet pen strokes will be.

Tyson Haeh:

Camera change isn't needed