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Young Detectives Club

by Pete Thomson

Final Rating: 4.52. Finished 69 out of 187 entries.

431 views including the voting period.

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Animator: Pete Thomson

Description: As team leader of the young detectives club, Mery, alone, is undertaking a search of a house of a legendary explorer who has mysteriously disappeared from his residence several days prior. The weather is not great.

Experience: Junior

Time taken: 3 weeks for Modeling, Assembly, lighting, Animate & Render

Comments:

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Michael Ayers Jr:

Too many cut shots in this scene.

Chanel Maria Novela:

I think the movement is too fast :/

NeSung A. Lawrence:

Too Fast... but as a whole it is awesome.. :)

Michael Inman:

I feel like the whole shot is speed up way too fast. I feel like your trying to get in 4 or 5 scares, when the shot would look a lot better if you focused on just 1 scare. Your character is moving to much, too fast. We can't read her movements very clearly. In my opinion, I would focus on that first scare, and spend some time refining her reaction to that scare instead of having her race up the stairs or bouncing off the furniture .

Annie Iglesias:

The atmosphere is good, but it goes too fast and choppy to discern what's happening.

Ben Hall:

Very interesting concept but the animation seems incomplete which is a shame cause this would look great fully animated so try again next time leave some more time available for it and I think you could wow us with your next one.

Sean Goggin:

Felt really rushed, but maybe that’s part of the mood.

Andrew Bower:

I think you could use less camera cuts and still direct the viewers attention where you want it. If it's where she is looking, or where the surprise is coming from ect.

Marcello Acevedo:

Story is unclear

Dewey Carpenter:

the camera is moving around so much it's hard to see the actual animation.