Daryl Marples:

Great end!

HariNarayan:

ha ha !!
ya idea is gud but lacks emotions !!

Haakon Gaarder:

very nice scenery!

Brad Regier:

i like the art design

Lauren Wells:

The cam moves are slightly distracting because they feel like jump cuts.

Carlos Fins:

"this a this girl that he loves" is real busy.. too many poses. Overall, seems a bit over acted for a guy who's dejected and about to commit suicide.

Craig Peck:

Never start the action with his back turned to the camera accept in some very small cases. Don't like the camera cuts.. try just keep one camera on such small dialogue

jim Duffy:

Nice to have the feeling of a little story here. Good acting.

Victor Wong:

There's good weight in the drop at the end. Facial expressions could be more extreme.

John Erickson:

lip synch seems a bit off. good job overall.

Aaron Clement:

Okay... not too bad... the hands felt like they were on ik... and felt like a maronet at times... I liked the ending.

Dhar:

Great cartoony environment, very sylish. Twining is problematic and the jumping off the cliff doesn't lend itself well to the story.

Eric Huang:

Why is he jumping off the cliff? :)

Josh Doohen:

lol. where'd he go?

kienwei80:

Why there is some cut shots?? I prefer you keep the camera like at the beginning. ( a bit zoom in )

W Jacob Gardner:

keep the camera simple. The cut might work, but the slow pan backwards was too much.
Also, the clouds are moving way too quickly and become distracting. they could be slowly creeping along for some life to the sceen, but at that speed they compete for attention

dinesh:

haha nice concept...with some pretty good acting!! :)

Derek:

camera moves are jump cuts and very distracting to the animation

Stuart Livingston:

weird cuts, weird concept, not really getting it, couldn't get past all that to really pay attentoin to the acting. Just focus on the acting please

David Artura:

The camera work kinda wrecks it for me. he cuts are too drastic. You should only have a cut on a punctuation mark, a natural break in the dialogue, or a plosion (the sound of certain stop consonants). The first cut clips the end of "... way."

Overall, there are some nice things going on, some of the overlap is really nice, and there is a good weight to the character.

John:

his movements dont really match his emotion, especially in the jump.

David Bokser:

the jump at the end looks nice, but the acting seems a bit too subdued for such a strong ending.

Markus Geerts:

Niiice piece! But why the (very crashing) crashzooms? :)

Mike Courtney:

nothing in the expressions or actions suggest the ending, consider the character's thoughts and feelings when animating

Michael Twentyman:

hardly seems like a suicide situation.

Trevor Hunter:

nice!

keep working hard on your animation but never use a jump cut. and why does he kill himself?

Jen:

Its a good treatment, although I don't think he sounds suicidal

Robert Tighe:

Your camera work hurts this piece. Nice effort though.

Cole Higgins:

Im not really sure who hes talking too. I think its me but im not sure. Also I think if he where going to comit suicide, he would be much more emotional. Good effort.

Bob Dole:

the camera cut is completely unneccesary. it would look much better without it.