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Language of Letting Go

by Jed B.

Final Rating: 5.32. Finished 37 out of 223 entries.

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Animator: Jed B.

Description: An young janitor wants to show what he's got.

Experience: 2 years

Time taken: 2.5 weeks

Comments:

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Dominic Rayner:

Animation great effort, but the story doesn't tell. If I was crafting this, I would have the guy struggling to pull the plunger in the toilet bowl, because I guess the monster has blocked it?? The plunger stuck to the floor, and the book reading seems irrelevant. You lost a gag which could have had me laughing.

Isaac Bautista:

At around 240 the monster's right arm drops too fast and his left elbow pops a bit when grabbing the book.
Maybe an acting choise but I think the blond guy shouldn't lift his head until his dialogue starts.
Pretty good overall!

William Barry Eggington:

Ha. Plunger. Good excuse for some nice motion/weight. Monster isn't as well animated as the guy.

J.K. Riki:

I like it! I'd cut the final cut and last reaction, it isn't needed. Nice concept!

Jo Anne Tan:

Not bad, but there could be a stronger sense of weight throughout your animation. Also the plunger needs to release from the floor much quicker and snappier, it now looks too rubbery and jellylike.