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An Advent of new Teacher

by Abhik Paul

Final Rating: 4.41. Finished 52 out of 205 entries.

482 views including the voting period.

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Animator: Abhik Paul

Description: A regular young dancer is confused with the appearance of new dancing master.

Experience: Little

Time taken: Not recorded

Comments:

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Kazi Abu Bakkar Chisty:

excellent animation work

Kendra Kaye Coffey:

good but I feel the dancing master's face looked concerned like worried. the tone of voice doesn't seem to reflect that to me.

Timothy Muller:

Hello there. I have a few notes and recommendations for your work:
1. Your lip sync in shot 2 is off. It appears you focused on capturing how the words sound by themselves rather than their sound in context of the clip. Your mouth extends outward for nearly all of it when that should mostly be saved and varied for vowels.
2. Shot 3's camera angle. Although I think your close up shots in general could benefit from being pushed back a drop, shot 3 is angled upward instead of downward. It works for shots 2 and 4 because the teacher is taller and reigns a command of power, so clearly the student should have the angle downward. You also broke the 180-rule so make shot 3's camera placement on the teacher's left-hand side.
3. Minor acting note. The teacher in shot 4 has concerned eyebrows. Unless there is a theme for amnesia (which I don't see), it doesn't communicate well into the scene.
Overall, I enjoyed watching this. Keep up the good work.