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Mother and daughter in a buffet

by OceanicBoy Joey

Final Rating: 4.93. Finished 52 out of 310 entries.

476 views including the voting period.

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Animator: OceanicBoy Joey

Description: The daughter is curious is there alchohol in the drink she had and the mum is trying shocked which she thought her daughter is trying to get some alcohol.

Experience: 1 and a half years excluding college years..

Time taken: roughly about week total time with all the on and offs combined..

Comments:

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alex:

remove safe frame and frame the scene better

Karl Bernhardt:

such nice animation, what a shame the resolution is awful, I've never understood why such good animators would ruin their own work with awful video quality

John Michael Wilyat:

The technical animation and even posing is great here. But I don't think the underlying story is clear which becomes very distracting.

Marcella D.:

The animation is not bad, but why did you include the framing/text from the Maya file into the Play-blast? It is kind of distracting.

OceanicBoy Joey:

Hey, this is me! Lololololol

Toaztz:

The animation is smooth. But still need to adjust a bit the actions. Some of the actions can be more exaggerate or move faster. Now seems all the actions is too flat.

When the first woman point to the cup can be more details and can maintain the pose like now also. ( no need to changed different pose, seems like too exaggerated like you did. )

The first girl seems like always at the same position. She should move more further when she get touched. Like suddenly get touched that feel, shoulders more up etc. Now she is too relax. And the hips seems like just always moving up and down.

The first girl's right fingers seems like move too much after the middle part to the end part. Too exaggerated for the actions.

The second woman's shoulders seems like always move together. Sometimes will be one up and one down like at the beginning when she drink, her left shoulder should be up and right shoulder should be down.

The second woman's leg seems like move too much at the end part? The knee part there... The first woman also have the same problems actually.

Anyway, the animation is nice!

Fernando Incetta:

Good idea overall, try to rely less on the automated splines and work more on your pose-to-pose. Good luck.

Kambria J. Farmer:

Your movements are really smooth and look really subtle, however, in my opinion "Mery" does move too much in the shot and would look more realistic if she toned down her actions.

Gaucelm De Villaret:

There's a bit too much "swinging" in this, I feel. Each pose just seems to go from pose to pose, and this doesn't look too natural.

Monica Stringer:

it looks like the mums torso and legs are facing in different directions

Daniel S. Hartono:

rapunzel!!

Coffee N Milk:

i like the animation when the mother touching another girl's chin (arround F225),the hand animation like nice