marta:

the animation is nice...but i don't understand the acting on this audio...

Clayton Miller:

You have some good poses, but I think there's too many of them. She seems to be over acting.

Adam Levin:

The acting here feels like stage acting. Everything is overdone (an easy thing for this shot) and the gestures are broad and a bit cliche. I like the eyes though.

Ryan Hobbiebrunken:

Great job! There may be a bit too much goin on here. On the "I'm living....gasp" part it looks kinda like she's got a stomach ache. :) The end pose on "a life" may be a bit too theatrical. There just may be a bit too many pose transitions going on. Great job overall!

John T. Coomey:

watch when she goes to cross her arms. The transition isn't very natural. also it's not really clear why she put her hands to her stomache... other wise you've some nice little ideas going

Dan Dulberger:

Crossed arms and the Hamletian (to be or notto be) poses seem lik odd choices.

Justin Weg:

Too many poses

Anthony Travieso:

cool stuff

Dwarakanath Jnaneswar Ekkirala:

good idea! I would take out the "W" gesture in the beginning and also, work on my eyes a little bit more. Also, you could stage the whole thing tighter to see her expressions more.. good work!

Florent Perrin:

Choices of the poses are quiet weird, by my point of view... Perhaps you could have advantage in playing it your self before start animating :)

Ryan King:

The motions are clean but acting wise it can almost be done in two keys if you wanted to. The first shrug kind of animation, seems alittle unecessary. if you kept the arms in the crossed position all of the way to where the are crossed and then the hold of the stomache seems kind of arbitrary. Personally I think this clip is about the dialogue and all of the poses are big and the kind of distract from the audio. Again there is nothing really wrong that i can see with the animation. It is just the acting choices really.

Dan Segarra:

She hits a lot of poses throughout your piece. Simplify! One pose can tell a lot about how the person is feeling. Break the audio down into phrases which represent each idea that's coming across... ie. "I'm living in a town I have no wish to live in" sounds like 1 idea to me. That could be 1 pose the entire way through. If it's a solid pose, it can imprint in someone's brain before you change it and give the audience more information to soak in. So I think you could simplify your phrases.

Anyway, good luck with this and next months entry. ;)

Aaron Clement:

Not too bad. Maybe a tad cleca. A little floaty... well staaged.

Lauren Wells:

Hey! :) I think you could get a better silhouette on that last pose especially with her screen left arm. Keep it up!

Alonso Soriano:

slightly too much going on, knock out 1 or 2 of those ideas so the remaining shine stronger. The acting choice of looking up for "a life" doesn't ring true to me, feels like posing, not actually reaching a real conclusion. Little more residual settling energy throughout the body after moving to a new pose would help, you've got some of it but I think you need to carry it more to more parts of the body as well.

-Alonso

Alex Zemke:

The acting choices feel a bit overdone, a bit melodramatic. The grand, sweeping gestures are just a bit over-the-top. Good polish, though!

Virgil Mihailescu:

the acting is not so motivated, a little vaudeville, and on "I'm living" it feels like she is leaning against an invisible object, there isn't enough overlap to help the movement feel more organic. but the poses are cute, and most of the lipsync looks quite nice.

Taber Dunipace:

Nice smooth animation but the acting is oddly unnatural. Every pose is a chiche depiction of one emotion or another with nothing to tie them together, nor any progression throughout the audio.

Robert Tighe:

Hamlet

Mike Courtney:

On "no wish" she comes down hard, but lacks the secondary action to go with it.

Kyle Mohr:

Nice job, I think you might have a few too many poses going on though. The pose on "living" is kind of confusing, when I first watched it I thought she had a sudden stomach cramp. Try to use as few poses as possible, and maybe try to make it a little more natural and less dramatic.

Keep up the hard work!

Damodar V Sawant:

looks too much of dramatic...kind of overacting

Erik Griott:

some interesting acting choices. to me it seems like she gets a stomach ache and them feels really good about the world.

luis veiga pumar:

lipsinc is good, just needs a bit of work.

body movement is strange and doesn't seem to suit what the character's saying

Christiaan Moleman:

The palms up gesture at the start doesn't fit the line. The hand out on "a life" is perhaps a bit theatrical. Mostly though you're going through too many different poses. I would start with the arms crossed and stick with that and then do another gesture on "life".

Jason Campbell:

Need to work on the sense of weight to the character feels a little floaty.

Jett Atwood:

It feels over posed and overly dramatic which makes it overall a really busy piece of animation for a line that is more subtle and internal.