Man in the Mirror

Final Rating: 5.7. Finished: 14 out of 161 entries.
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Animator: dan alvarez

Description: A father ashmamed of his own thoughts toward his son.

Experience: 5 years

Time taken: from July 6th - July 31st, most evenings when I had time after work.

Comments:

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Ian Jacobson:

Nice rub of the face!

Giorgio Alberto Rodriguez:

is really good...but there's not too munch sinc in movements and lips...it could be beter!!! go on

Ed. Hull:

Very nice work!!

Matt Hirengen:

very good! great posing and acting.

Sunny Kharbanda:

Good work on the gestures and expressions. The staging might have worked better if it was simpler, with only the guy facing us in the shot. As it stands now, it raises too many questions

Juan Pablo:

I really like the hand sticking to the face really good job and acting choice

Raf.

Josh:

I like it. Some movements are too exaggerated, tho.

Adam Green:

Great concept/staging with the guy looking in the mirror. It' a tad over-acted though (especially 170-270)for such a subtle piece, even though you have a nice "acting crescendo" in there. Maybe just try voluming-down the crescendo :)

Shon Stewart:

Good movement and emotion. A lot of your great animation is lost because I'm confused as to who he is talking too? why is there a mirror? Is he talking to me or himself?

Frame 66
Some quick subtle head "no" movement before the big nod will add some need texture and impression that the character is thinking.

Kensaba:

Very well done animation, but it´s not clear who he´s talking with. Realy nice movements, congrats. Staging could be improved if you change the color of the door, to clear his sillouete; and the eyes at "and once you..." are too crazy, I couldn´t read them. Good luck!

Igor Medovshikov:

Really good.

chrisbyk:

Really nice and subtle animation

Daniel Erwin:

cool performance.
im not sure on the story though.... who's he talking to? the mirror, practicing what he's gonna say?... the performance alone goes with the dialogue nicely

chakravarma:

body movements are awesome but concept is missing.u should work on more acting choices.

Andre de Villiers:

You seem to know what your doing, keep it up! Great acting

Erik Griott:

good, but i don't know if he is talking to himself or to someone else.

Noah:

Really polished work. As well executed as it is, I think the face-rubbing bit is stepping on the following line. I think it would be clearer if there was a brief period of rest in his body before he snapped into "he has a gift" so that the movement you're doing with that line doesn't feel as hurried.

Martin Silfvast:

nice work!

Ryan Shannon:

i like the animation, but it doesn't really do a lot for the dialogue.

nice work though.

Cameron Huber:

I think your acting choices are wicked but that there are simply too many movements within each one. The best example of this is when he says "my son has a gift". You could pull this move off without the rotating hand and face move because since the audio file doesn't take long to kick into the next part which is an angrier "HE HAS A GIFT!" you aren't left with much time to get out of that pose. This makes it feel too rushed and constantly moving.

I would say just start trimming your animation. Everything moves very nicely it's just that there is too much movement. Very nicely done!

Brad Regier:

i love this; especially up to "anything." After that, it feels like he should start pacing the room or something; there should probably be a cut there?
Really cool gestures and stuff though!

Paul Fuller:

I think there are some really nice things going on, especially the hand going across his face and dragging down.

luv2animate:

Love it ...the hand rubbing the face!!!the positioning of the character..the body language..beauty!!

E. Cooman:

Talkin' to himself, like the idea.

Nathan Buchanan:

I love the face wipe! Excellent character, I love the nuances and weight of the shoulders. His eyes seem to shake a bit on "once you acknowledge", and the end seems kind of weak..

jonas ekman:

liked the beginning but i felt that it was missing some polishing in the middle part, great effort though!

Leow Chan Ghee:

The contact of his hand on his face is solid!

James Fearn-Wannan:

Tsk. Tugs yr heartstrings, doesn't it?