Matt Hirengen:

This needs overlapping action and moving holds.

Amdbcg:

good concept :) , however, there's no after or pre action - leaves it feeling stiff
also, no lines of action (eg - not exagerated enough)
Kindof feels stopmotion-ish

Barnabas Boehler:

There are a few parts where the body feels disconnected because it feels stiff and stll while the hands or face are moving. Overall not bad, although it's a bit strange that apple doesnt' move or fall off with him moving around so much before the kids shoots if off

colus havenga:

that apple looks like its glued on hes head.. ;) hes movements would definitely make it fall off so maybe just watch that. facial is a bit weak..cool idea though

Josh:

Move the mouth.

Tim Roberts:

nice ending. I was wondering about the circles on the forehead.

Matthew:

Add some breakdowns, arcs, the like. And when he gets hit, it should be much quicker.

James Lee:

I like the stop motion feel of this. I can tell you have a good grasp of the the fundamentals. Quite entertaining.

Erik Griott:

nice, but i would have liked to see more movement in the apple. your character is moving around here and there, and the apple is stuck onto his head like a hat, but then a sucker arrow hits him and it falls right off like nothing. also, some of your movements feel a little linear.

barak drori:

pretty stiff

Raasi N:

Suggestions - Lip sync needs to tuned in with audio...also lip movements can be slightly exaggerated as well ...right now it is very little mouth movement compared to the highly intense audio....
...also the apple looks very static on the father's head in the beginning...even while he is moving his head...

Martin Silfvast:

the apple sticks too well to the head i think.

Brad Regier:

Ha ha, i love this one!
The arrow impact lacks...well, impact. Try having it pop onto its target in fewer frames. One, or even instantaneously. And then rotate up and down fast (you know, the way arrows do).
Try to get the shoulders and torso involved just slightly when he moves his head. Certain movements look pretty linear, could use some easein/easeout, moving holds...
Good project!

Clayton:

love the marks. the apple seems to be glued to his head until the end.

E. Cooman:

could use a bit more detail on the LS. Nice work though.

Chad Swanson:

Interesting I like the Nightmare Before Christmas style you used .

Frank G:

Some of the holds lasted a bit long. This is well crafted story telling and a nice gag. The 'gift' gesture was interesting. The final expression is gold.