Erik Griott:

the only part i think is out of place is when he turns away and puts his fingers to his eyes. i think it's too much overall action and it takes you out of the scene. an action like that probably requires more time for us to feel the same that the character feels.

David Humphreys:

good scene, original idea and good expressions at the end, a pose or so too many in the ethical implications bit

Rich Lauzon:

Good POV and funny.

P Walters:

very nice.

Jett Atwood:

It's good but he's over posed. Take a few out and it'll feel a lot more like he's actually thinking. The actual mouthshapes don't read easily.

Frank Collazo:

good point creativity

Yeray Díaz Díaz:

Lacks a little more smoothness from pose to pose in my opinion.

jeff beck:

i think it was great but your lip sync needs some work

Theo Edmands:

Great job on the ducking pose. The staging is a little odd at first but I see why you've chosen it. All round pretty good, though.

Missy Feaster:

Good animation, but needs more clearly-defined beats.....this is all-motion, all the time.

Christopher Lutz:

Nice animation and staging.

vic:

arcs.... flow in movement... and pose to pose...... not too many poses ... nice effort

Simon Bean:

the composition works nicely and the start and end poses are good but the mushy lipsync and acting through the middle section lets it down.

Aaron Clement:

Nice ending... the duck was good, too... Lip sync felt a little off in places, though... keep up the good work.

Robert-Jon Eckhardt:

Great cinematic thinking!!
The mouth's corners distracted me, it feels like there's something wrong with them. The lip sync also doesn't quite capture the voice, but the body animation is strong.

Eric Scheur:

I _LOVE_ the staging you have set up here. Especially the way that you only partially see the "Wait" pose, and then the hands part like an opening curtain. Very nicely done. :)

You definitely have a good instinct for poses--especially the crouch when the letter is cut, and the "talking about opening someone else's mail" parts.

Overall, I think there could be a few less poses in here, and you could hold your poses more, so that we feel a consistent attitude through the piece. For example, I think that the pose on "consider" is a really nice pose--but as far as the piece is concerned, it doesn't really feel necessary. At that point, it doesn't feel like he's actually considering anything, and if he is, then he's in that pose for a very short amount of time to consider all of the ethical implications of opening someone else's mail.

Finding places to hold your poses and work within them can really help strengthen your character's performance.

Beyond that, I'd say that there are a few places to pay attention to silouhette. On the whole, it's very very nice. But at frame 66, for example, the letter takes on a kind of non-letterish shape and the first two times I watched through, I thought that he had actually snatched the knife away instead--so I was confused about where the guy got his knife back.

These are nitpicky things, but focusing on them a little more can help really bring things together nicely.

Good luck with the next round! I like your work and look forward to seeing more!

Bilal Ahmad:

nice executed man!

Taber Dunipace:

I understand the desire to animate only one character for time's sake, but the staging in this piece really hurts the acting and story telling quality. Animation quality is nice enough, but poor staging and acting kill this piece.

Juliano Bezerra:

Very good animation man!

Hector Lopez:

Good job.

Gregory Marlow:

Lip sync is off but otherwise very good.

Kev Haynes:

well animated, could use some more overlap/follow through in some places, like the arm sweeps. They seem to hit a few walls. Also think the pose on "consider" is a bit cliched, but other than that this is really good work.

Victor Wong:

Gestures are generally in sync for the most part; lips, however, are not. Emotional expressions look good.

Chris Smith:

Not a bad effort. Did not hit home like it could have, but not bad effort overall.

Jennifer Anaya:

in some parts it looks like it doesn't sync up well. it could just be the way the video was uploaded. pretty good though.

Roshan.k:

i like the leter's point of view.. acting too is great..a few clean up issues i can see in the graphs (!). btw, the paper's animation is good..looks like paper indeed..nice job

David Shum:

Hahaha, i like that idea!
First person view ---

Tho- it looks like "I" am handing him the mail, rather than him yanking it away.

Also, maybe give the dude in red 4-5 frames of re-action time.

Right now, the knife sway, and his reaction happens 1 frame appart. It would give the viewer some time to redirect our focus from knife to the dude, and also give him a more natural reaction time.

Hope that made sense ><"

C. J. Cow:

i luv the first person view. great acting. i wonder if your intend was to have audience as the guy with the knife, perhaps the character should be look directly into the camera instead of to the side?

plu:

i think this is good, but there are too many ideas, remember...less is more!!!

Brian Nicolucci:

The lip sync never seemed right. Is this an encoding issue or was it the same in the original video?

Like the acting choices.

Henk Kok:

Opening Shot could is so important. Superb silhouette is essential. Easy fix :]

nice job, shaking the letter was a nice acting choice

Mike Courtney:

The lip-sync is off. The turn to the side seems rushed getting there and back. Nice poses.

Christiaan Moleman:

Given the position of the POV hands I would expect the other character to look directly into camera, but apart from that the staging works pretty well.