Mike York:

This has come along way. I still think it needs some polishing but mine does as well :-)

Greg M. Johnson:

I like the expressions on the goofy one.

Ken Rice:

The jump up is really really nice. However the gesture on '...best day of my life' always bothered me because it's directed dead straight to camera. Also not sure the change of camera angle works.

Cassandra:

Nice movement and anticipation.

Joe Mitchell:

the third cut isnt working well

Jerome Heuze:

the last scene needs some work 289

Henning Koczy:

work on Moving holds. Too sharp a stop.

Erik Westlund:

First part of the performance is forced. Big downwards gesture isn't working. Both characters who say "mine too" are not doing anything but moving a hand. A small weight shift or change in line-of-action would help a lot. Cute idea of having the dorky, overbearing character jump into the arms of the other characters. Once he is dumped you don't need to have him stand up again. The staging around frame 225 gets very awkward, which is probably why you have a separate shot of the one character at the end.

Christiaan Moleman:

I think some of the beige guy's gestures are a bit much, like how he swings his left arm down on "Best", or the laughing. The latter feels kind of like you're indicating laughing more than sincerely laughing.

Nice idea jumping into Phil's arms though.

Ron Price:

Some really nice bits here--I like the facial work at the end a lot. Watch your eye directions on the glasses guy!

Jason Smith:

Nice job.

Aaron Clement:

Some nice exaggeration in there. A little unnatural at times... I like the expressions.