MartyB:

Bas choice of staging, alot of dead space

ben malberg:

I would move the frame to the right more so the character is more on the left side of the screen. If you have time, try acting out your idea first with video reference, then start sketching in your main poses.

Brent Forrest:

See me after class.

Sandra Tapia:

I think that it needs body movement, I only see his right hand, mouth and eyes moving. Nice concept.