Andy Wakeley:

I really like the idea of this one, and the poses are there, just needs some more work on the mechanics and weight to make it really work.

Erik Westlund:

There is a clever quality to the setup here with the laser light beams tapping the two. One is trying to deal with the situation. The other more resigned. The proactive character (demonstrated consistently... well done) in his anger manages to deal with the problem. Clever. The light beam seem to be placed arbitrarily making it hard to interpret if the characters are staying inside their limits or not. Acting only occasionally shows characters trying to cope with risk from light beams. Needs to be consistent.

Aja Bogdanoff:

Cool, I love the idea here, it's a fun and very creative setup.  I think you could do more throughout to incorporate the setting in the acting, because they seem to get a little casual about the laser beams while they're talking.  I'd think about maybe having them continue to struggle to avoid the beams as they talk, keeping most of the gestures and broad movements to the head and face, rather than the arms.  Also, it's not easy to see the guy on the right taking the spray paint from the other guy, because you're not drawing our attention to it before and as it happens.  In animation you always have to really telegraph what's happening to the audience, let them know to pay attention to something by making it clear and obvious.  Otherwise, I think your acting and mechanics are pretty solid, continue to work on avoiding occasional floatyness in the body and you'll have some really strong work.  Good job!

Taber Dunipace:

Looks like everything is working pretty well from what I can see. A bit more careful planning of poses would help but overall this is definitely on the right track.

Rachel B:

A bit floaty in places, but I really do like the business you've come up with for these guys - actively working for something instead of just standing around and saying their lines.

Chan Ken Neth:

no audio. but i'd say still good animation!

James O'Neill:

I feel the camera move is unnecessary. You could probably tell the same story with the first shot the whole time. Also, the animation seems like it swims a bit, maybe tighten up your transitions between the poses (speed them up). It will make it more snappy, and it will read better. There is also no sound?

Virgil Tanasa:

your animation is floating from pose to pose, try to hold some so it can be read better. and give some motivation to the actions instead of making them look random, strange and confuse the viewer (throwing that cylinder into the button at the end)

Jean-Luc Delhougne:

Good ! Some really nice poses here!

Joe Garhan:

good idea

David Humphreys:

I dont think you need to be cutting ths scene up. if you kept it as the long shot you start with i think your punchline would work better.

Other than that you got alot of good stuff here, i especially like the use of the click in the sound file when he drops the stick.

Russell:

I like your acting choices. I think the movements between poses are a little slow and sluggish. Snappier transitions would aid greatly it your poses having more power. Good idea!

sharad kumar:

nice idea!!....but animation looks floaty...keep working.

Bill:

Nice idea. Creating an interesting context made this more original than most. Great use of the dropping stick, not only for sound effect, but for giving the non-speaking character something to do. I would have liked to haves seen a reaction at the end to the lasers turning off.

Joan Delmont:

I like the idea, it's funny, but there is a lot of problems on the animation... ( forgive my english)

Pablo Piccione:

Nice idea and ending...I like how you used the sound at the beginning whith the stick

Ju:

Keep going on ! Due to the static hips your characters are a rigid. And also try to smooth the movements.

Elisa:

very creative situation :)

Pete Shand:

Good stuff, like where its going, obviously needs some refinement but i like the switch of camera angle, just so awkward movements and timing

Steve Brown:

Nica action but maybe a little too floaty?