Emmanuel:

Probably change the camera angles a bit.

J K:

Still looks blocked out.

Zainab Siddiqui:

Movements seem a bit mechanical. Id sugest having a bit of secondary action

Ken Rice:

Good effort - however you need some stronger poses I think. your characters are freezing too much and the scene is a bit symmetrical.

Scott Douglas:

Very pose-pose feel, needs moving holds and more easing. Some poses don't feel appropriate to the audio, such as the one on "still cut a deal".

Sean Coleman:

Try varying the beat of your poses. It feels a little to rhythmic.

Mariah:

Good start! Would like some overlap and more body movement.

Micah Betts:

The characters seem to stand still too much for my tastes, I think the character on the left could be more expressive.

James O'Neill:

Some of the poses are unclear. There though be much more overlap, especially since the characters are moving so slow. It would feel more snappy if the transitions between poses were faster. The staging seems a bit cramped, and it is to asymetrical, especially with the black contrast at either side of the frame. It is not a very appealing or interesting composition. I would suggest a more 3/4 angle shot, with the characters not in the center of frame.

Dan Dulberger:

Youre stricking poses like a ninties madonna. You should flow into them more naturally.

Virgil Tanasa:

poses are very straight, you should use more arcs to define the line of action. i believe the angle of the camera is not the best one to help you with the performance.
you should use moving holds instead of keeping some poses completely frozen.
try not to forget to keep your characters in balance when creating the poses.

Ryan Lowe:

too much stop and go.

Russell:

Composition really takes away from this piece. A perfectly symmetrical piece can be really distracting. Also putting Alfred in the background dead is a good idea, but you could have blocked him with one of the Max characters and halfway through, then moved that character to reveal the dead body. Its like a Christmas present, you wrap it so the recipient can appreciate it as they unwrap.

The poses you selected are decent. However, the poses are held and swim into each other. Try to avoid a perfectly held pose. It takes away from the animated part of animation. Keep them loose!

Sergey B.:

Not many face expressions
Good job

vince gorman:

moving holds

JD van der Merwe:

Little too many still poses.

lizzie:

nice animation and timing.

Victor Wong:

Good subtle storytelling.

Joan Delmont:

Try to work for a better posing and expression, something more original...

Taber Dunipace:

Really awkward staging with everything happening in the center. Spread it out a bit and use that outside space.

Erik Westlund:

Very symmetrical staging; two standing characters framing the slumped character in the background like bookends. Profile staging of characters closes off a lot of information from the audience. Movement between poses is start stop, start stop.

Bill:

I like then general blocking and poses, and would like to see this taken farther.

Brian Boswell:

Very awkward staging. Some stiff movement.