Scott Douglas:

The animation of the guy closing the trunk is good, but some of the other poses and breakdowns look a bit awkward.

Ryan Lowe:

leave the lighting out next time. you cant read teh characters.

Ken Rice:

Nice - thank goodness the left guy's got some clothes on and got rid of those glasses.

Mike DeGar:

Nice enviornment and lighting. First thing I noticed is that the white guy doesnt really move around a lot, perhaps have him shift his weight onto another foot or somthing like that. Umm another thing is that his mouth tended to be in the shadows becasue of his large nose and his lipsynch isnt as noticeable as the other guys.

Mariah:

Package Man looks good, nice and fluid. But Sergio's walk backwards seems a little stiff. Good lip sync!

David Walz:

thats really really really
good

Andy Cunial:

Love the idea!

wei keong:

Good job!

Jean-Luc Delhougne:

Pretty nice piece here ;)
Try to play more with shoulders and torsos to make the poses more natural ;)

JD van der Merwe:

With a few refinements this could be great.

Taber Dunipace:

Try to pose your characters a bit more naturally; film yourself for reference. Good setup and interesting premise.

Lisa Taylor:

Nice job. I like the animation of the shorter guy shutting the boot.

Ezra Allen:

on the forground model think more about where his weight is, on the first pose shift, on "its time" he is leaning over his left leg but there is no weight going through the left leg. This is true on "now while we can" the other thing is I would try to use a different pose here rather than repeteing the earlier pose.

Again when the character says "muder" youve got weight and balance issues. the character leans forward too far and would fall over. when a character leans this far forward bring his ass backwards to balance the weight of his head, a good rule of thumb for this is the toes over the nose rule, if a characters nose has moved in front of his nose he is off balance.

The character in the background is nice I like the shutting the boot, good weight. a little bit of IK popping on the legs there.

Good staging, nice idea with the car. over all good effort. Nice work.

Nathan Jent:

I'd like to see the blue guy shift his feet around instead of being planted throughout the whole shot

Erik Westlund:

Screen left character has a very distinct personality that is different from screen right character who is stuffing body in trunk. The screen right character appears to be animated in a more natural and believable way. You make no bones about using the repetitive hand chops on "...cut a deal" an overused gesture in this competition. Very brave. Almost works. I still don't like it as an acting choice. Maybe OT but a little more fill light would make it easier to read the faces.

Jon Graef:

I really like the way in which you kept the characters alive with little subtle movements when they weren't speaking or when the character in the back was trying to slam the door shut. Nice job.

Richard Clark:

Need to improve on your posing.

Sam Caudill:

Great setup! Guy on the right was animated really well interacting with the car. It think the guy on the left might need some more shifting of weight. His right leg seems to be stuck to the ground.

Alonso Soriano:

watch your silhouette's. it's all a little uniform in intensity, can you ramp it up in a spot or too to improve the texture?

Phillip Johnson:

the fats guys arms look incredibly stiff when he turns. The bald guy needs some follow through on his arm when he says his first line.

frantz:

not snappy enough for the front guy.

Ken Vass:

more of an accent on a few places (poses)

chloé:

When it closes the trunk, it's very good. But when he left, it is strange. It is very steep.

padraig post:

Nice use of actions to give each character something to do.

Brian Boswell:

Package man seems to react to being an "accessory to espionage and murder" too soon. Otherwise pretty solid. The legs seem too planted, making the main character feel off balance.

James O'Neill:

I like it, I would suggest adding faster transitions for package man. The blood is a bit blurry, it wouldn't be that diffused if it had happened just before. Mom loves it. Great job. Love love.

barak drori:

I think the problem here is acually the finish, too much shade, as I try to focus on your animation, it gets in the way. the animation is very nice though.